Because of the rapid growth of the technology, it become the valuable and inherent part of our daily life. People use the electronic devices, especially the television and the smartphone, all the time to access useful pieces of information, to get in touch with each other and so on. There are also a controversial question about the influences of those devices, whether the telephone has more impact on people than the television has or not. From my point of view, even though the telephone has many positive and negative impacts on people, it cannot outweigh how the television influence on us.
To begin with, the television is the main source of reliable information and also provides people with many entertainment and educational programs. Think about why people decide to buy an expensive, huge television even though they have a smartphone to use, because the telephone cannot fit with the need of everyone like the television does. Moreover, nowadays, most televisions have the same functions as the smartphones. For example, people can surf on the internet, watch videos from YouTube and also do many great things with the television, we do not need smartphones at all. From my personal experience, the television is easy to use than the smartphones and also allows me to be well-informed about the events happened wherever in the world.
Furthermore, as I mentioned before the most televisions have a great functions, many people prefer to use it instead of telephones and smartphones because they have a huge screen. In fact, because people realize the wave radiated from the screen of electronic devices is harmful for their eyes, they tend to decrease it by using things that has a big screen. Besides, from the television, people can learn something new such as a language. For example, my grandmother is not the user of smartphone and telephone, but she always been happy to use the television to know the news and also watch older movies to spend their time engaging. In addition, my younger sister who has a three years old, learning English through the television.
All in all, I think the television has an direct and indirect influences on humans and for their daily routine. Also,the advantages of using it considerably outweigh the cons of it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: been always
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Suggestion: , the
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Message: Did you mean 'outweighs'?
Suggestion: outweighs
...the advantages of using it considerably outweigh the cons of it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, for example, i think, in addition, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00527704485 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83761771007 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525065963061 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6533311993 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5625 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6875 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200753487886 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707797245392 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548604369101 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127180773959 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632738426589 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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