Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephone has greater influence on people’s lives than television has.
In such a civilized society, in spite of various disagreements people have in numerous areas so far as one’s view goes, one point that virtually everybody approves upon is the importance of technology. This is the mostly owing to the fact that it has a great impression on people lives. Whit this in mind, a broad range of controversial attitudes might stimulate heated debate as to whether telephone has an enormous effect on people lives or television. Among the many opinions that might arise in this regard, I personally believe that television’s influence is much more than telephone due to several conspicuous reasons which will be elaborated in ensuing lines.
The first reason coming to mind is that television is the best way to access news. Needless to say that most of the events and news from all over the world are shared within television today that is easily reachable for all of the people. Although it is usual that news is shared earlier on the internet rather than other mass media such as televisions or radios, a great number of people are avid to watch the news on television because of the fact that it gives a great opportunity to see what exactly occurred in world by their own eyes. According to a recent yet reputable study, led by researchers at Sharif University of technology, a majority of people especially those are in a range of 50 to 70 years old prefer to know prevalent events by television and thus based on these records the existence of television seems more and more.
Secondly, televisions are an essential source of entertainments, educational programs, and advertisement. Not only it provides various cartoons and movies for people to spend their leisure time, but a student can use it as a useful source for their education matters. Take my brother as an example, he usually watches some specific channels related to his school classes such as mathematics, physics and etc. Another prominent aspect of television is an advertisement. Nowadays, most of the companies advertise their products in order to attract more consumers with televisions due to its great impression on people in comparison with other ways of advertisements such as billboards or posters on the roads.
In conclusion, there are many reasons which can be persuasive enough that influence of television in people’s lives is much higher than telephone’s impact. Based on the given reasons above, I am sure that without television, life will be so hard and tedious
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 383, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...attitudes might stimulate heated debate as to whether telephone has an enormous effect on peo...
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Line 3, column 221, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...sion today that is easily reachable for all of the people. Although it is usual that news ...
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Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...re avid to watch the news on television because of the fact that it gives a great opportunity to see wha...
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Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ol classes such as mathematics, physics and etc. Another prominent aspect of television ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, in conclusion, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02884615385 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9903652918 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564903846154 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.6585316547 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.466666667 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7333333333 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220689545382 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716248345707 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679982754756 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139770659245 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440301031639 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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