Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not.
In such a civilized society, in spite of several disagreements, people have in various areas o far as one’s view goes, one point that virtually everybody approves upon is the importance of being success for students. This is mostly owing to the fact that it is every student’s desire to become successful in his own life. With this in mind, a broad range of controversial attitudes might stimulate heated debate as to what is the best way to success. One idea of prominence in this regard is to keep rooms cleaned and well-organized. I personally concur with it. Among many reasons one can give for this opinion, I will elaborate two conspicuous reasons through ensuing lines.
The first and important reason that comes to mind is the fact that a clean room provides a great opportunity in order to concentrate well. In other words, having a dirty and bustling room not only is an obstacle for an efficient concentration but increase students stresses in a decimation way as well. Take myself as an example, I had 3 main exams last semester, which I had to pass all of them in order to become graduated, sadly I did not get my desire grades even though I had worked so hard as much as I could during the semester because of my weak concentration due to some labors who were repairing the wall of my room three days before my exams.
The second interesting point which deserves some words here is that having a neat room able every student to become more disciplined and well-organized person in the future. It is usual that most of the students enter to university after ending their high school and begin a new life in a room shared with several students. Having a good background will be so useful for each of them to neat their personal beds and thus have a cleaned and well-organized room. According to a reputable study at the Sharif University of Technology among all students on campus, it was found that those had a neat room, could pass their credits with a high grade in comparison with those had a busy and confusing room.
In conclusion, there are numerous reasons which can be persuasive enough that having a neat room has a significant influence on student’s success. Based on the given reasons above, which are good concentration and being disciplined, it is obvious that student with a cleaned room will able to overcome difficulties in a convenient way than others.
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...spicuous reasons through ensuing lines. The first and important reason that come...
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...room will able to overcome difficulties in a convenient way than others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, thus, well, as to, in conclusion, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73508353222 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84994781343 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541766109785 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.3036805579 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.266666667 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9333333333 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224261566013 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786129049696 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502964920844 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141157481217 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738673350594 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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