Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will
be more likely to succeed than students who do not.
In this hectic life, there is a great pressure on the students to be successful. They always are in competition with other students in same age for being successful. Albeit, there is so many factors that can contribute their prosperity, many controversies arise whether students, who keep their room neat and well-organized, will be more likely to succeed or not. Many people think that a neat room can be conducive to more success rather than a messy room. When it comes to this point, I agree with the statement. In following lines, I will present and investigate two reasons to substantiate my response.
The first reason is that a well-organized mind is result of a well-organized room. Generally, people with messy rooms, do not have a sorted brain, It takes too long for them to find their stuffs. In comparison, people with disciplined rooms, usually are fast because they have a stratified mine. This stratification can expand into everything in their life; they classify their tasks in their mind. Eventually, this classified mind is more likely to attains success. For instance, consider a primary school student. If s/he has a disordered room, s/he tends to forget their tasks and home works more often than a student with organized room, because there is a lot of stuffs in her/his room that can appeal their attention.
The second noteworthy reason is that only an industrious person can have a neat room. َAlongside with all other tasks that one should put time on them, cleaning the room may take time and effort from the student. Students, who attempt to have a neat room, should be diligent enough to do all this tasks. In comparison, students who do not pay attention to their room, usually are lazy, because they want to go off the responsibility of their rooms and put it on their parents. In the same example, for a primary school student, because it need time and energy to clean her/his room, only ones tend to keep their room in a good shape, that are industrious enough to handle everything in a nice way. Hence, success needs steady endeavor, efforts to have a neat room can bring about a more successful person.
In summery, having analyzed the reasons above, one can surmises that the more neat room, the more success in personal life because not only does it result in a well-organized mind, but also it need endeavor.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
... on the students to be successful. They always are in competition with other students in s...
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Line 5, column 684, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a nice way" with adverb for "nice"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...industrious enough to handle everything in a nice way. Hence, success needs steady endeavor, ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 56, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'surmise'
Suggestion: surmise
...ing analyzed the reasons above, one can surmises that the more neat room, the more succe...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82222222222 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7128308652 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488888888889 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2820236793 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.65 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377347661608 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111513601534 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622286722695 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226148435951 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752895385819 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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