Education and good background always play vital role in finding related and well paid job, however nowadays contacts play important role regardless of knowledge.
The most controversial points is here, that some people are in view that education and good background can one to have brighter future, on other hand some people are in view that contacts and knowing high position authority is enough for brighter future.
As far as my view is considered, it depend on situation, I feel so because of following reason:
To begin, school studies teach both aspects of life and practical, for instance when I was studying my bachelor degree I have taught they description of finance and also the practical form of it, I was ready apply my knowledge in practice, therefore I have applied for position of internal auditor and I successfully passed interview and started my career, I believe the only reason behind my success was unbiased organization.
My brother was graduated from MBA , he was much optimistic about that knowledge is superior to a brighter future, however he applied for a job, which he was good candidate for the position, but only because the organization hire people based on contacts regardless of education unfortunately he couldn’t get passed.
To compare above two situation, in first organization considered knowledge the key criteria for hiring a suitable candidate, on the other hand another organize only consider contacts, therefore I’m in view getting dream job need both knowledge and as well as, other ability like being responsible, on time, and the ability of team work, but It doesn’t mean to hire people regardless of mentioned ability and skill and consider only contacts.
To conclude, I strongly support the view that knowledge always play important role for brighter future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 294.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2619047619 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88078957545 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544217687075 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 49.0 20.1344086022 243% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 149.217309839 48.9658058833 305% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 257.833333333 100.406767564 257% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 49.0 20.6045352989 238% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.1666666667 5.45110844103 315% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13706829383 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705387223015 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0187521450361 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0670307257993 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160293190629 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.8 11.7677419355 236% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 13.28 58.1214874552 23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.6 10.1575268817 232% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.12 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.01818996416 124% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 21.6 10.0537634409 215% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 10.247311828 273% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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