TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

A friend of mine who is a money exchanger could recently acquire a $100,000 benefits due to the news he was following! Due to the consensuses between the US government and its confederate democracies on embargoes against Iran, that guy could earn that amount of benefits from decreasing Iran’s money value. Now I say I agree to know what is happening around the world not only for the mentioned reason, but also for the upcoming ones.

First, we can save our lives by knowing what is happening around the world. There was a man wanted to travel to Yemen some months ago. He was not aware of the struggles between Saudi Arabia and Yemen, I recommended him to check the situation once. When he figured the bombarding of Yemen out he scared and said, “I would no longer endanger my life”.

Second, we extremely increase our potential for paying attention to humanity. While Che Guara was traveling around the US to see what is happing, he saw unbelievable situations of the poor were living under the cruel govern of the time. Even though he was not a politician, he revolutionized and stood against the cruelty. Guara said, “I would no longer let the governors who destroy democracy to continue their wicked plans”.

Third, we can learn better through the scholarships announcing year round globally. I was searching for the scholarships to continue my education in the US. Though it needs a lot of money to apply for an American university, being aware of the world happenings applied me freely. In addition of studying, I radically knew many good cultures of people around the world.

To sum up, I eager to write this quote of an unknown scientist. “In order to have a particularly amazing lifestyle, try to know what is happening in the world”.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...lso for the upcoming ones. First, we can possibly save our lives by knowing what is happe...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...ted to travel to Yemen some months ago. he was not aware of the struggles between ...
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Line 4, column 448, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y to continue their wicked plans'. Third, we can learn better through the s...
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Line 6, column 21, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...lans'. Third, we can learn better through the scholarships announcing yea...
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Line 6, column 284, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
... world happenings applied me freely. In addition of studying I radically knew many good ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, third, while, in addition, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89576547231 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81254467298 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605863192182 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3038774866 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9375 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103700221733 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0358717073035 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426260397003 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.061793389173 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215860159155 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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