In most countries young people form a large proportion of those who are unemployed Why this is the case andwhat can be done to solve the problem

In today's world, for some societies increase the rate of unemployed people, especially young people, now become a serious problem. That is to say, prolonged exposure to these kind of issues may also give rise to stress, insomnia, and mental problems, including depression. There are main causes, each of which requires an appropriate response from governments and society as a whole.
Firstly, in some societies and some cultures, there is a common issue which is saying that young people cannot handle high level positions in companies like management positions. To put it differently, there may be a lot of management positions available, but the qualifications are not based on knowledge. Instead the hiring committee in a company prefer to hire elder people, although they may not have a knowledge in that position. It is essential, therefore, that whenever there are vacancies for supervisor positions in companies; the age limit would be added as one of the main criteria of that position.
Secondly, because of the advent of new technologies, most of the employers are looking for people who are expert in a certain area. Young people, therefore, need to attend to universities to be an expert in one area in order to be qualified for the position. In other words, most of young people have to expend most of their youth on universities. Clearly, the only way to address this issue is that universities and colleges introduce some new programs that are both practical and intense. Thus, spending less time and energy on new program, young people can be qualified for skilled job faster.
In conclusion, there is no simple solution to the problem. However, if measures I have suggested were introduced, we would all see a day that the rate of unemployment among young people decreased. As a result, this perennial problem which has serious repercussions for society would be eliminated.

Votes
Average: 6.2 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
.... That is to say, prolonged exposure to these kind of issues may also give rise to stress,...
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Line 2, column 307, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...lifications are not based on knowledge. Instead the hiring committee in a company prefe...
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Line 2, column 405, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'knowledge'.
Suggestion: knowledge
...lder people, although they may not have a knowledge in that position. It is essential, ther...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, in other words, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08333333333 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90609524041 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557692307692 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.6378136845 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.733333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4666666667 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17789819489 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606726856445 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464375186862 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102767136386 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063024454031 0.056905535591 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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