Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion
Few people think that children should be encouraged by their guardians to participate in planned group activities during leisure time. Some people say that it is vital for children to understand different ways to engage themselves at their own. In the following essay I will shed light on both views and will present my opinion.
On one hand few people believe that, organized group activities during leisure hours or vacations are supposed to be beneficial for growing children. It helps them grow mentally, physically and prepares them to tackle challenges with confidence in later years. Children often feel lethargic and tired after school and are more drawn towards unhealthy activities such as watching TV or playing video games that have negative impact on their young minds. Therefore, it is very important that parents encourage them to participate in group activities such as sports or reading. These group activities include group competitions among young children such as book reading, rugby, mathematics contest, general knowledge quiz, farm trip, and different other extra-curricular activities. For instance, a recent research by Calgary University shows that 90% of candidates who have participated in extra-curricular and organized group activities during school years are more successful in their professional and academic careers as compared to those who never participated.
On the other hand, self-learning of new skills during leisure time has its own importance as few people believe that children’s process of thinking is far greater than an adult. Therefore, they should learn new skills by experimenting themselves. Additionally, they believe, self-learning boost confidence and unleash true potentials of a child and makes them independent to make their own decisions as compared to those who always seek advice from guardians or parents.
In conclusion, I believe the group learning during leisure time is more beneficial as it boost self-confidence, knowledge base, social interaction and morale of a child.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60128617363 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09899126484 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591639871383 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4281281049 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.0 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9230769231 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357959970958 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123254403633 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889301832867 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206588454889 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119514773483 0.056905535591 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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