TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task: Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth

The main topic of both the reading and the lecture is about the possibility of traveling to Mars. The reading passage claims that there are several problems in this way which really did not exist for people who traveled to the Moon. On the other hand, the lecturer not only casts doubt on every single point raised by the author of the reading passage through citing three different counter-arguments but also believes that there are three solutions for the mentioned problems as well.

To begin with, the author of the reading passage establishes that the first issue to this fact that a round-trip to the Mars and back takes approximately 2 years which is actually too long compared to the trips to the Moon. Under such a circumstance, astronauts are able to provide sufficient water, oxygen, and food for their trip. Conversely, the lecturer rebuts this idea, stating that they can use the hydroponic method in order to grow plants in water rather than soil. Therefore, they can easily provide their food in this manner. Also, they enable to recycle wastewater and provide their drink water. Moreover, plants absorb carbon dioxide from the air and produce oxygen which is really helpful for the astronauts to breath.

Furthermore, the reading passage brings this notion that the astronauts' mission on Mars will be under a zero-gravity condition which may have several negative influences on their bodies. The lecturer supports a mutually exclusive view compared to that of the reading passage and points out that they do not have any problem with this circumstance because they had experienced it before several times. In such a situation, they use several techniques and take vitamins to solve problems regarding muscle mass and bone density.

Eventually, the reading passage goes on to mention that on this mission, astronauts are actually subjected to hazardous levels of space radiation. Notwithstanding, the professor specifies that this concept is not totally dangerous because they can readily keep themselves safe from space radiations by providing a shielding area which is not really massive and does not add much weight to the ship. They can use this area when they really need it.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'astronauts'' or 'astronaut's'?
Suggestion: astronauts'; astronaut's
...ing passage brings this notion that the astronauts mission on Mars will be under a zero-gr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, conversely, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, really, regarding, so, therefore, well, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1373.03311258 134% => OK
No of words: 361.0 270.72406181 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.108033241 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65097097636 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 145.348785872 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545706371191 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 419.366225166 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2165087808 49.2860985944 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.933333333 110.228320801 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0666666667 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6 7.06452816374 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0499903750048 0.272083759551 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0185519715358 0.0996497079465 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0234077829286 0.0662205650399 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.032421912534 0.162205337803 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0125303968462 0.0443174109184 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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