It goes without saying that in this sophisticated and radically progressive era in which we live, all human being are always striving to purchase a new and high-tech device in order to facilitate their daily tasks by using that product. Whereas some individuals debate that buying a new product immediately is very important and they do not wait for a short time, on the other side of the continuum, stand others, believing that they buy it when the device was used by the other people broadly. As far as I am concerned, I categorically concur with the second mental attitude and believe that it is important for all persons to wait for a short period of time. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be clearly substantiated by underlying and conspicuous reasons.
To commence with, it is no secret to anyone that when a new product is produced, it has several errors and bugs, and moreover, those problems will be solved by the producer by passing time. Under such a circumstance, it would be better for all individuals to wait and observe the advantages and disadvantages of that product. An example can shed some light on this subject. Several years ago, the Apple Company released IOS 9 for iPhone 6s. In the beginning, this software had lots of problems and the majority of people discussed that their cell phone was stopped abruptly. In such a situation, the company published an announcement that the bugs would be solved immediately, as a result, I waited for a couple of months and did not purchase that article. If I purchased it at that time when it was released as a new technological device, I would obviously have had lots of difficulties with my cell phone.
Furthermore, as a matter of fact, one of the most paramount points is that while a new commodity is introduced by a company, it is very expensive and its price is at the top. Therefore, it is not logical and reasonable for any person to buy that article because its cost will be gradually reduced. An example can drive this notion home dramatically. In the aforementioned example, I did not buy iPhone 6s exactly when it was inaugurated to people by Apple Company because I knew that its software has lots of problems and its cost is relatively high and is not rational. Consequently, I bought that cell phone after a short period of time when its price had declined sufficiently.
To wrap it up, taking into account the aforementioned reasons and examples, I am of opinion that if they really decide to buy a new advanced technology device, It will be great for individuals to wait for a short period of time. This is because the price of that product will decrease in a short time and also, its problems will be resolved by the producer.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: period
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...eat for individuals to wait for a short period of time. This is because the price of that prod...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2247.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69102296451 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.856540429 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465553235908 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.5828684581 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.833333333 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6111111111 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237428475818 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699464320123 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568904140054 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152281163147 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317263306602 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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