TPO 27 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement If people have the opportunity to get a secure job they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying Use specific reasons and ex

It goes without saying that in this complicated and progressive era in which we live in, all human beings are always striving to earn more money by getting a prestigious occupation. Whereas some individuals debate that getting a safe occupation is more important than waiting for a satisfying job, on the other side of the continuum, stand others, believing that people should take the opportunity when a secure job is suggested. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with this mental attitude that getting is a secure job is much more significant. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be substantiated by underlying reasons.

To begin with, we should never forget that we live in a competitive world with a progressive rate of population and it is not easy for any job seeker to find a prestigious job with a higher monthly salary. Therefore, if a person wants to reject the opportunity to get a safe occupation, there may not be any guarantee to find a better position with job satisfaction as well as may be unemployed for a long time. As an example, consider a person lives in China, a country with the highest rate of population in comparison to the other countries. If a person does not pay attention to the opportunity to get a safe job, numerous people will be ahead in the queue to get a job with a satisfying condition. Therefore, his chance to find a job will decrease dramatically and he may remain without any work to do for several months.

Moreover, if an individual gets a secure job, he will definitely become interested in that job owing to the fact that he always involves in doing some tasks related to that job. In such circumstance, this person should see the glass half full because he is able to get experience, improve skills, and learn information related to that occupation. All the mentioned factors will give rise to become successful and happy in his job and also will get a promotion in the future. An example can shed some light on the subject. Several years ago, I accepted an ordinary suggestion form Tesla Company due to the fact the head of the engineering department told me “the boss wants to keep you here for five years at least”. In this situation, I got the job and shut my eyes and stopped searching for any other positions. Then, I attempted to increase my knowledge about that position and became experienced in that field which led to an unbelievable promotion and being the vice-president of that company. If I had waited for another job, no great position like this would have been recommended to me.

In sum, taking into account the aforementioned reasons and examples, I am of opinion that getting a secure job is more paramount than waiting for a satisfying job. This is because there is a strict competition between people to find a job and also a person can get satisfied in his secure job by increasing his knowledge about that position and becoming experienced.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 619, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...n to the opportunity to get a safe job, a large number of people will be ahead in the queue to ge...
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Line 5, column 533, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'year'?
Suggestion: year
...ed some light on the subject. A several years ago, I accepted an ordinary suggestion ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, at least, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2440.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 518.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71042471042 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90123034082 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482625482625 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 790.2 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.4563111531 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.421052632 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2631578947 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332590285111 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10899160809 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818248394945 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227637235795 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353740229958 0.0645574589148 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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