Issue: the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
The topic derides the effects of modern technologies in our life and stated that the use of modern conveniences hinders the progression of strong and independent individuals. I disagree with the statement for the following reasons and deliberately examine the examples to bolster my stance.
First of all, we can not overlook the effects of technologies on our daily lives. We use several amenities in our diurnal life. For example, small but effective conveniences like coffeemaker to our alarm clock. For a busy person, it is difficult to engage in small activities and this small tech helps them to organize and save some time in their life. For our daily use, for example, cars and metro help us to communicate easily and conveniently between places. Without proper communication, it would be desultory for workers to communicate.
Another amenities like smartphone and computers, with the help of our phone and computers we can access the whole world. With the help of the internet, our life is easier than ever. For example, someone needs a quick update about the weather but he is outside from residence, then with the help of internet access the weather news. Now with the modern amenities, life is easier than ever, before we need to go to the bank and stand in the queue to pay our bills, but with the internet, we can pay from our home. Modern conveniences create more job markets and it is impossible to stay in traditional jobs.
Some people argued that modern technologies slow our physical and mental abilities. For example, in early days people go to the market and socialize physically, but now they buy from online markets and socialize virtually which had some abysmal effects on our societies. Another example is, calculator easier our complex calculation but abridge the mental capabilities for calculation. The luxuriant use of modern technology made our jobs more sedentary.
At the epilogue of the topic, I would say that It is true that modern technologies have some negative effects but every choice has an effect and it is our personal choice which one we should pick. The modern amenities and luxuriant use of them have some negative effects but we can not deny that these technologies create a new job every day and open a new aspect of life and a feasible choice is in our personal opinion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 353, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...anize and save some time in their life. For our daily use, for example, cars and me...
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Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...of life and a feasible choice is in our personal opinion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, then, for example, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90101522843 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7461987577 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484771573604 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9815478417 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.631578947 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7368421053 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102788155916 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0381666563605 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415660540656 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0692841857857 0.150359130593 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380448351534 0.0667264976115 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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