Humans arrived in the Kaliko Islands about 7,000 years ago, and within 3,000 years most of the large mammal species that had lived in the forests of the Kaliko Islands were extinct. Previous archaeological findings have suggested t

Humans who arrived on Kaliko islands 7000 years ago are being held responsible for the extinction of the mammals on the island. And the assumption for this arguement is that if the humans used to hunt fishes , then they are likely to hunt mammals as well. To deduce whether humans were truly responsible for the extiction or not we'll have to get rid of conclusions that are based on false assumptions .

It is mentioned that the human on Kaiko island used to hunt fish for a living on the basis of the fish bones that were found .And this evidence is being used to infer that since humans hunted fishes they are equally likely to hunt mammals as well.But such an inference is rather unfounded as there have no profound evidence that these humans hunted mammals. Similarly the assumption that the hunting of mammals is what led to their extinction is also unfounded , it could have been due to a variety of other reasons like lack of food , a catastrophe like a hurricane .

Also the stone tools that were found have been presumed to be the tools that were used to kill these mammals , while there has been no evidence of the same.If a tool would have been found embedded in the remains of a mammals , then one could then infer that mammals were indeed hunted using the weapons.But there has been no such evidence that has been found.

Thus from all the lack of evidence we cannot be sure as to whether humans were indeed responsible for the extinction of the mammals or was it due to other causes.

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Average: 3.7 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, similarly, so, then, thus, well, while, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1230.0 2260.96107784 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 270.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55555555556 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33349313582 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 204.123752495 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455555555556 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 388.8 705.55239521 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.8473053892 166% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.5747383582 57.8364921388 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.714285714 119.503703932 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.5714285714 23.324526521 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 5.70786347227 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 5.25449101796 419% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188811122686 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113994497177 0.0743258471296 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107906621375 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124977886506 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665289329848 0.0628817314937 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 14.3799401198 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 48.3550499002 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.76 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 98.500998004 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.1389221557 154% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 274 350
No. of Characters: 1204 1500
No. of Different Words: 122 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.069 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.394 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.237 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 69 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 46 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.209 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.484 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.755 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5