Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Serving in the military as a woman is one of now the most controversial issues that people like debating about. Some people maintain that men and women have an equal right to serve the army, however, others insist that there are some differences between the two genders. In my opinion, I partly agree with the former's view and I will address my reasons in this essay.

In view of physical condition, it is undeniable that there is a physical gap between men and women. We can see easily most of men are taller and stronger than women. These advantages definitely work on military service. According to the BBC, most offenders tend to ignore policewomen rather than policemen when they meet police officers at the crime scene. It means they think they are superior physically than women. It can be applied to the army as well.

On the other hand, I believe that all people should be given the same opportunities in government jobs. Once they have the same right, then the government have to test them whether they can pass or not. When it comes to military force, all women should be permitted to be the army, navy and air force when they pass the standards as the same as men's ones. Furthermore, even they have a physical limitation, women can serve in the army in various filed of militaries such as data analysis, planning of campaign and back-up positions.

In conclusion, It is not easy to say that females have the exact same ability as males, I partly believe that females have the same chance to work wherever they want with properly ability.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the men') or simply say ''most men''.
Suggestion: most of the men; most men
...etween men and women. We can see easily most of men are taller and stronger than women. The...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1285.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6897810219 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46631361775 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547445255474 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2370739233 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7857142857 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5714285714 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1850193057 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642829436521 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673414776142 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100080964836 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637909133653 0.056905535591 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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