Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.
Which viewpoint do you agree with?
Advertising products for our life is one of the controversial issues that people like debating about. Some people say that advertisement enhances our lifestyle, others insist advertisement make people to buy something even if they are not aware of it.
It is undeniable that there are many benefits when people watch many kind of advertisements. First of all, some good items can make our lives better.
For instance, women had to do the laundry with their hands in the past. Also, it took a longer time and caused physical burden. However, as improving technology, new laundry machine was invented and the company which made the machine advertised people to buy this one. As a result, most of women finally could feel free of household and it became a first step to enter the economic society. Secondly, some public advertisement can help people. For example, there was a flood in Indonesia. so government alarmed people to collect money. it makes a success.
Nevertheless, in my opinion, I believed that there are more disadvantages for commercial advertisements. It is clear that it impacts on people instinct in a negative way. For illustrate, I have some experiences that I bought something even though I did not need it. When I was waiting for my friend, I decided to just browse in department store. However, I saw the advertise of a lady’s clothing store which posted grand sale and I bought a dress in the store which I did not need at all. this phenomenon can affect as younger as people are. Moreover, advertisements for commercial does not always show the truth. According to BBC, 500 companies broke the advertisement laws with over advertisements last year.
In conclusion, it is true that an advertisement is essential for us in modern society. I suggest that we have to distinguish what we really need or not and companies should aware of themselves how much impact they have and tell the only truth with their advertisement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many kinds
...ere are many benefits when people watch many kind of advertisements. First of all, some g...
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Suggestion: most of the women; most women
...ed people to buy this one. As a result, most of women finally could feel free of household an...
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Suggestion: So
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Suggestion: It
...rnment alarmed people to collect money. it makes a success. Nevertheless, in my...
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...lear that it impacts on people instinct in a negative way. For illustrate, I have some experience...
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Suggestion: This
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94832826748 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99446248169 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.619079843 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9545454545 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72727272727 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307829753295 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694927768556 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684701491659 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159644198022 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789454020225 0.056905535591 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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