Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays advertising is view by society with two different lens. While some people believe that advertisements can made us buy things that we really do not have necessity, others think that advertising is a good way to show the news about products that may improve our daily life. Both sides of view have their reasons however, in my opinion advertisements stimulate excessively the consumer culture and I will explore this thinking in the following essay.
Firstly and foremost, we can clearly notice that advertising generally promises importance or values that we believe that we need to have, but in the most cases, it is only a marketing play. For example, in the middle of the 20th century, advertisements about cigarettes was common in the society and showed how glamorous and modern were people who smoked at time. What we can see from this is that advertising was only selling a product without have its hazards presented to the population. At time goes by, we found how dangerous could be the cigarettes.
Even though advertising tell us about new products that could get better our lives, sometimes they exceed in the real meaning of the products that might represent just a fashion during a time and this is easily seen through children and adolescents. Many advertisements focus on this age range because they do not have yet a critical thinking about the products and usually the advertisers make children and adolescents believe that they really need some toy or game to they feel belonging of their groups.
Concluding, advertisements have its importance, but I strongly believe that they have to be controlled, because several times its encourage the consumer culture and do not represent a really need that we have.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'lens' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'lenses'.
Suggestion: lenses
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Message: You used an adverb ('really') instead an adjective, or a noun ('need') instead of another adjective.
...e consumer culture and do not represent a really need that we have.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, so, while, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0830449827 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81799019041 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567474048443 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.7926693384 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.9 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317041328815 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125240791886 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925267028612 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192732777883 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724767768015 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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