A new president of Sartorian which manufactures men’s clothing in a memo predicts that once they resume production of alpaca overcoat, it will be profitable. In this argument this new vice president assumes potential customers would purchase them in Sartorian, and also demands of alpaca overcoats will upsurge. However, the new vice president should vindicate these assumptions before resuming products.
Firstly, the vice president assumes that they should pick up the production of alpaca overcoats because of a new available fabric supplier occurred, which can bring about a success. If the author does not give details to elucidate whether this new fabric supplier is reliable or not, resumption of production might not be a wise choice for Sartorian, and certainly does not make profit then. For example, the new fabric supplier might not deliver good-quality raw material of alpaca overcoats, but down-market and valueless, or it cannot guarantee supplying the wool fabrics can be consistent in the future. Consequently, if the assumption proves untenable because of unreliable fabric suppliers, the resumption of products might be unacceptable, which triggers their failure to make profit.
Secondly, the new vice president also assumes that the demands of customers buying alpaca overcoats would upsurge based on the outcry from customers and on offer for this kind of products from the competitors. However, he or she ought to check why competitors discontinue to produce the similar products and whether the customers might replace it with alternatives to warm up in winters during the past five years. Therefore, it is possible that customers might successfully allot passion into wearing down overcoats or jackets, meaning that they would not choose alpaca overcoats again later on. Also, it easily speculates that the competitors might find out tiding down of enthusiasm for wearing the alpaca overcoats, forcing them to suspend production. Had the author analyzed the reason for these two phenomena, it would have been helpful for Sartorian to determine whether the demands are increasing and whether they should resume production for profit.
Speculating that demands of customers purchasing alpaca overcoats are aggrandizing, the vice president should contemplate the assumption whether they can obtain more profit than ever before. In particular, in recent years, the wholesale price and labor salaries as well as the rental price of factories might be more expensive than before, therefore, Sartonian might invest more, triggering that they might not become profitable than before, but lose money unfortunately. Although demands and the overall increment in clothing prices are rolling up, the cost is a very substantial determinant to decide whether they will have profitability. If these possible scenarios debunk the validity of assumption, restarting to produce the alpaca overcoats might incentivize Sartorian to consider more ahead of time.
In conclusion, it is easily understandable that Sartorian should shoot for profit to the maximum as the priority, however, the new vice president should ponder the assumptions existed in this argument, which might weaken the argument. Only when he or she input more consideration on these assumptions with more testimonies, can the argument might be persuasive.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 509 350
No. of Characters: 2764 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.75 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.43 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.818 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 225 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 171 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 126 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 96 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.278 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.951 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in particular, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 31.0 12.9520958084 239% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2839.0 2260.96107784 126% => OK
No of words: 509.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57760314342 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92484172385 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471512770138 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 881.1 705.55239521 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.3264456929 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.722222222 119.503703932 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2777777778 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27777777778 5.70786347227 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159361429973 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605711660571 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520033393974 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100287163588 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572183644724 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 14.3799401198 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.3550499002 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 98.500998004 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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