TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him.

The passage mentions that the painting named " Portrait of an elderly Woman in White Bonnet " was attributed to the Rembrandt but there were problems with the painting that suggested it could not be a work by him.The passage cast doubts in collar, light illumination and panels of wood of the painting. However, the lecturer contends that the painting was painted by Rembrandt with the following observations.

Firstly, about the way women in the portrait is dressed, wearing a luxurious fur collar, the lecturer states that while doing the x-ray of the painting, fur collar was not the part of the original painting. It was placed on the top of the painting to show it luxurious.

Secondly, about the effect of light and shadow in the painting, the face is shown illuminated by the light below it but there is no such light object to illuminate light rather a dark fur collar. And the lecturer states that originally, there were light color collar below the face that illuminated light from below which explained the painting was mastered with effects of light and shadow.

Thirdly, the back of the painting was painted on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together and Rembrandt painting never used the panels glued together. And the lecturer states that, on the process of adding the fur collar, the panels were also added and glued together. Moreover, the woods used were from the same tree as used by the Rembrandt in painting.

In sum, thus, the lecturer states that , the paintings was actually painted by Rembrandt.

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Average: 6.8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1003.0 1373.03311258 73% => OK
No of words: 204.0 270.72406181 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91666666667 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4712170971 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 145.348785872 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519607843137 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 419.366225166 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8521422426 49.2860985944 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.375 110.228320801 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.125 7.06452816374 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.504563135719 0.272083759551 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.233467095035 0.0996497079465 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0961461424878 0.0662205650399 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28230595183 0.162205337803 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108793734795 0.0443174109184 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 53.8541721854 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 63.6247240618 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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