Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Unlike in the past, people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is an era of booming information, where a massive scale of entertainment is flooding into people’s life. Under such circumstances, some believe that the increased time people spent on recreation today is far more than they should, compared to a much less time spent on what they should do. From my perspective, however, people nowadays do not show a tendency of wasting time more than they used to.
People today are working longer time as a result of the mounting pressure and heating competition of the contemporary world. Most of companies are faced with challenges of being replaced by competitors who are superior in the service or product quality. Therefore, enterprises force their employees to work harder with more tasks to accomplish, making most people cannot be as relaxed in their jobs as people in the past were. Under such high pressure, it will be not reasonable to say people today have indulged themselves more in personal enjoyments than people in the past did.
It is undeniable that people have more options when it comes to personal enjoyment than they did in the past. With increasing choices to have fun, it is possible that one may no be able to resist the tempt of delaying business for entertainment. However, most people today possess a greater sense of responsibility, which means they are not likely to actually waste time on such things rather than go to work or study.
Unlike in the past, people in the new century know more clearly about what they want and what they should fight for. To be more specific, people have easier access to schools and other resources of education now, they are gaining a growing persistence about dreams, which enables them to better pursuing their goals. On the contrary, people in the old days had less literacy rate. In terms of what kind of life would they like, they might get lost. Uncertainty about personal development may result in more time taken up by meaningless amusements. Hence it would be irresponsible to conclude that people nowadays are more likely to squander time on recreations.
To summarize, people today do not pay too much attention to entertainment instead of what they should do, for that they have heavier burdens and clearer goals than before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the companies') or simply say ''Most companies''.
Suggestion: Most of the companies; Most companies
... competition of the contemporary world. Most of companies are faced with challenges of being repl...
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Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: NOW[3]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...o have fun, it is possible that one may no be able to resist the tempt of delaying...
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Line 5, column 197, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...sible that one may no be able to resist the tempt of delaying business for entertainment....
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Line 7, column 549, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ime taken up by meaningless amusements. Hence it would be irresponsible to conclude t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, kind of, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94473684211 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7198090918 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542105263158 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1054809924 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.529411765 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3529411765 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330514490747 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107723824533 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922955141506 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211115149549 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868423304574 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.