Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In the developing process of children, family education plays an essential role in shaping the values and cultivating their personalities. There have been debates over whether children with excellent academic performance should be rewarded with money by their parents, of which opinions are divided. Those who believe that this promotes children’s motivation to study, however, fail to take the negative impacts of this idea into account.

It is true that sometimes children need encouragements to maintain their enthusiasm for study. Appropriate reward can certainly have a positive effect on children, which acknowledges their effort and shows how proud their parents are for them. Nevertheless, offering money to children who get satisfying grades in school can be inappropriate, which may have an opposite outcome. Doing this in the long-term can cast a cloud on the development of children.

First of all, faced with a “salary” offered by parents for doing a good academic job, some children may focus more on getting higher marks than improving their abilities. As we know, the meaning of school education lies in the acquisition of knowledge and the process of gaining learning abilities, instead of attaining high marks and compliments. If parents keep on giving their children money every time they perform well in an examination, going to school and study may face the danger of diverting from its original purpose. What is worse, using money to encourage children will also hinder their comprehensive understanding of what is precious in life. Making money the only goal of children’s life and study can severely harm the quality of education, and children’s characteristics.

Apart from the potential threats to the success of education, this reward system may also hamper the relationship between children and parents. What most children really need are the care and praise from parents, instead of money awards. Imagine a child who works hard to achieve extraordinary academic performance just to avoid letting his parents down, while all he can get is money and other material supplies in return rather than a sincere compliment and a hug with love and proud. This kind of family relationship is cold, unhealthy and can cause more problems than parents can expect. For example, children who feel ignored may take more aggressive measures to attract the attention of parents, like fighting with others or telling lies all the time.

After all, although children need encouragements and gifts to keep the motivation of studying all the time,it is critical to choose suitable ways to reward them. Instead of simply giving money to their kids, parents should pay more attention to forming a close relationship and providing solid support.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, thus, well, while, after all, apart from, for example, kind of, first of all, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2358.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37129840547 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97231689631 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548974943052 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8591206896 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.105263158 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1052631579 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63157894737 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278487596558 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876870803436 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470197710224 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156154093399 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751440844476 0.0645574589148 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?


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Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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