Some people believe that an academic education is important for young people. Others believe that experience of the real world and travel is more beneficial.
Discuss both views then give your opinion.
Academic education has been part of children's curriculum from last many decades. But, it is undeniable that we always look for guidance from someone who had better real world experience and travel irrespective of how much academic knowledge we have. It is commonly believed by many that academic education is essential for young people while others believe that real life experience is more beneficial. This essay will examine both the views and provide my opinion about the same.
To begin with, academic education has been part of our learning since many decades and it has also been seen that academic knowledge is basics for our living. Let us take a very simple example, when we buy a new blender, we always had to look its manual or instructions to learn how it works we cannot use it otherwise. Academic knowledge has always been a base for practical knowledge. This proves that academic education is an essential part of school education that offers information and improves concentration. In a survey conducted by Harvard University in the year 2010, it was found that only 2% of people who had immense real life experience was offered job and others were rejected because of lack of academic background.
On the other side, Only theoretical knowledge itself is of no use until we put it into actions. So, to some extent real life experiences are also essential to learn and become smart and productive person. For an instance, learning all the computer programming fundamentals and do not implementing into machinery will be of no use so theory without practical is incomplete. It has been found that we learn better from our own experiences. For example, a person who has drove a car to Mt. Washington knows the risks involved in driving however, a person who has just given a theory test cannot describe it all.
In my opinion, real world activities are more beneficial.They give better realistic experience that a person remembers for rest of his life as compared to anything that he has been taught by someone at some place.For an example, a youth who saved a life of his friend by offering mouth to mouth oxygen would never realized it's advantage until he did it himself no matters how many times he had been taught the same in his school.
In conclusion, both academic education and real life experiences are essential for the growth of young people.Both of them have equal learning opportunities for youth however, I personally believe that practical knowledge through the experience of real world and travel is more beneficial as they could be self analysed and require your sense of understanding, prompt reaction and many other skills which an academic education would lack.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2255.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 454.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96696035242 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77837833473 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495594713656 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 506.74238477 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.378482087 49.4020404114 221% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 140.9375 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.375 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352508996505 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113759019261 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122514659192 0.0667982634062 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220704729637 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13096412134 0.056905535591 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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