As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of
humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
There is no current proof that advancing technology will deteriorate the
ability of humans to think. On the contrary, advancements in technology had
advanced our vast knowledge in many fields, opening opportunities for further
understanding and achievement. For example, the problem of dibilitating
illnesses and diseases such as alzheimer’s disease is slowing being solved by
the technological advancements in stem cell research. The future ability of
growing new brain cells and the possibility to reverse the onset of alzheimer’s
is now becoming a reality. This shows our initiative as humans to better our
health demonstrates greater ability of humans to think.
One aspect where the ability of humans may initially be seen as an example
of deteriorating minds is the use of internet and cell phones. In the past humans
had to seek out information in many different enviroments and aspects of life.
Now humans can sit in a chair and type anything into a computer and get an
answer. Our reliance on this type of technology can be detrimental if not
regulated and regularily substituted for other information sources such as
human interactions and hands on learning. I think if humans understand that we
should not have such a reliance on computer technology, that we as a species
will advance further by utilizing the opportunity of computer technology as
well as the other sources of information outside of a computer. Supplementing
our knowledge with internet access is surely a way for technology to solve
problems while continually advancing the human race.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Ability
...ncing technology will deteriorate the ability of humans to think. On the contrary, ad...
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Suggestion: Understanding
...ds, opening opportunities for further understanding and achievement. For example, the probl...
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Suggestion: The
...;s disease is slowing being solved by the technological advancements in stem cell...
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Suggestion: Is
...reverse the onset of alzheimer's is now becoming a reality. This shows our ...
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Suggestion: Health
...ur initiative as humans to better our health demonstrates greater ability of humans ...
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Suggestion: Of
...s may initially be seen as an example of deteriorating minds is the use of inter...
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Suggestion: Had
...t and cell phones. In the past humans had to seek out information in many differe...
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...humans had to seek out information in many different enviroments and aspects of life. Now ...
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Suggestion: Answer
...e anything into a computer and get an answer. Our reliance on this type of technolog...
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Suggestion: Human
...for other information sources such as human interactions and hands on learning. I t...
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Suggestion: Well
...opportunity of computer technology as well as the other sources of information out...
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Suggestion: Problems
... surely a way for technology to solve problems while continually advancing the human r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, well, while, for example, i think, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 252.0 442.535393258 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48412698413 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26886832497 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 215.323595506 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547619047619 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0781044992 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.636363636 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9090909091 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.97078651685 422% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152747273637 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663132283912 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526100948819 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0509581927691 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552312964832 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.