The personal and work-related challenges that young people face today are not very different from the challenges their parents and grandparents faced in the past

By and large, people had to face different life or work problems during their life throughout history. But to what extend are have those problems differed is a place of argument. There are a plethora of people who are in the conviction that the troubles one may face regarding his personal or work life is by far different from those that older generations, like our parents and grandparents, faced, while others take a radically different point of view and assert that there is no significant difference between the personal and work problems that our former generations had to overcome and our generation. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned, I accord with the first group. Among countless reasons, which give adherence to, my opinion I will delve into the most conspicuous ones in the subsequent paragraphs.

Firstly, with the technological advancements of modern era, the problems that were as a result of miscommunication either in a matter of personal or work life has been diminished substantially comparing to past eras. The advent of Internet which was not available in the past has enabled people to communicate in a more efficient way to overcome their problems. For example my father always tells me stories about the vicissitudes of talking to my mother 50 years ago during the gulf war. Since the availability of telephone in Iran during that time period, was strictly limited to military use, he was deprived of hearing her loved one's voice for almost two year. This difficulty was more severe for my grandfather since mails, which could easily get lost in those days, were the only way of communication. Not only has Internet enabled me to video call my wife anytime I desire, it also has provided me an opportunity to share the excitement moments of my life with her instantly even when we are far away from each other. However, these technological advancements have brought about different problems, like the adverse effects of pornography or violent Internet games which we have to deal with.
Secondly, peoples are nowadays more educated and thereby less radical and more understanding comparing to the past and thereby the problems that we face in this modern era is not even closely comparable to those that former generation had to cope with. Gone are the days when the marriage of a black man and a white woman was prohibited since some thought that mixing pure generations with blacks can have adverse effect on society's health. The ridiculous thoughts that my parents had to deal with at work place due to their different skin color, are not being imposed upon me and my generation as radically as past.

In short all the aforementioned reasons and examples leads to the conclusion that the advancement of technology and literacy has altered the nature of the problems that our generation has to deal with comparing to former generations.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 258, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ormer generation had to cope with. Gone are the days when the marriage of a black m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, as to, for example, in short, as a result, by and large

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2414.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98760330579 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83462942321 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518595041322 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.2948914447 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.875 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.25 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169203354124 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574547092384 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068942344356 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100481037512 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831444236761 0.0645574589148 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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