By and large, the importance of family in people's life is undeniable. There are a plethora of people who are in conviction that the help of family members can pave the way of success for people while others take a radically different point of view and assert that reaching to success is much easier without the help of family members. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned I accord with the first group. Among countless reasons which give adherence to my point of view. I will delve into the most conspicuous ones in what follows.
Firstly, the family members' help can come quite handy, not necessarily in the materialistic matter but also from spiritual matter as well, since it gives you the assurance that if you were to fail, there was another chance to get and that it wouldn't be end of the world. For instance as I turned 25, i received a very tempting job offer from one of my old friends, to be a part of a new start up he was managing. The timing couldn't be worse, since I was going to buy this new house with a loan that I had received earlier and had absolutely no money in hand. Seemed really risky for me to quit my well payed job and pursue a career which could have failed easily, since most of the startups are dead end. My older brother Saleh, whom I share everything with, asked me to be brave and to know that he will help me if things didn't go as planned. The startup as a matter of fact turned out a success and I never asked anything from him but, the mental assurance he provided, gave me the courage to pursue my intrinsic.
Secondly, the help of family members can provide people more concentration especially at the young ages. One doesn't have to be worried about the loans or food or rent due, while taking the chances. For instance when i started my sister started her career as a civil engineer, I paid for her rents so she can focus more on her career. She was really short on money and wanted to be a waitress so she can have enough money to start his own construction company. Providing the rent and money for food and loans gave her the chance to start what she wished for with more concentration. It could have gotten much harder to surmount the problems if I wasn't there for her at that specific time period.
In short, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that family members' help can be quite helpful for one to success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in short, as a matter of fact, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1968.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41255605381 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41362688156 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508968609865 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3588589989 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.333333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7777777778 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201097387917 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653676104104 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757366934632 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148747218673 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634318607652 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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