Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall stu

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Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

While it might seem logical at the first glance that the author’s argument to terminate the student evaluation of the professors, to enable the students of Omega University to secure the good jobs. However, the argument is flawed. In order to bolster the author’s argument, we need significant amount of evidence.

To begin, the argument is based on the assumption that the professors have started to assign the higher grades to the students since the evaluation by the students have been started; however, such assumption is unwarranted¬– no evidence to support the claim has been provided by the author. There may be plenty of other reasons that the students in Omega University has focused to study for the good grades. Similarly, the professors have used the best effective technique to enhance their study and the good grades. Furthermore, there might the reasons that the university might have enhanced the study materials, library, laboratory and student friendlier environment.

Secondly, the argument is based on the assumption that due to inflation of the grades on Omega University, the students are less likely to success. The author has failed to provide the reasons on this scenario like Alpha University students might have got the career counseling and the intern programs for the selection in the job.

Thirdly, author assumes that Omega university students are getting fewer jobs near around them. On claiming so, the author has failed to administer how many students from the Alpha have got more jobs. Similarly, there might be the instance of Omega University students getting jobs a much better than the Alpha University students’ get. Similarly, there may be the reason that majority of students from Omega University might from the other towns so they were selected for their city for jobs.

In conclusion, due to sweeping generalization of the entire population the author’s argument is not logically convincing. The argument could be strengthened if the author provides the information regarding the professors’ desire to teach the students as well as the students’ awareness in the study before and after evaluation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 283, Rule ID: A_MUCH_NN1[1]
Message: Maybe you should omit the article "a", leaving only 'much'.
Suggestion: much
... Omega University students getting jobs a much better than the Alpha University studen...
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Line 7, column 394, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...there may be the reason that majority of students from Omega University might fro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 343.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37609329446 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98104350367 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466472303207 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3322651839 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.933333333 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8666666667 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0666666667 5.70786347227 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236345667045 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872976048336 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545384344191 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135391459025 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621047415895 0.0628817314937 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 343 350
No. of Characters: 1759 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.304 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.128 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.659 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.999 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.867 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.402 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.635 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5