Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crime.To what extent do you agree?

Most developing countries are facing the same issue of the high crime rate. Some people believe that only a stronger military force can solve the problem. In my opinion, even though more police on the streets could be somewhat helpful, other means such as education and social assistance are the real solution to this issue.

Police can help in preventing potential criminal activities. If offenders realize that they are under close supervision and most likely to be caught when planning to commit a crime, they would think it carefully and probably give up criminality. To take Hong Kong as an example, Hong Kong used to be a place with a high rate of crime in the 1960s. To improve the situation, the governor at that time amended the police system and assigned more police force to the streets form 24-hour patrolling. This method dramatically decreased the number of serious offences and eliminated all small crimes. Therefore, intense police patrolling can threaten criminals and prevent some crimes from actually happening. However, the negative sides of devoting more to the police force are the tremendous financial burden to the government and, sometimes, possible abuse of administrative rights.

Education and the social welfare system are the real solutions to the problem of crime. Unsurprisingly, countries and territories with serious crime issues also have an extremely low percentage of the educated population and poorly developed social welfare. Education teaches people how to tell right from wrong and inspires the better part of human beings. A study done by phycologists on prisoners in jails demonstrated that those who received education during their sentences have a significantly lower rate of the second offence comparing to those who did not. Furthermore, well designed and implemented social assistance system is also crucial in lowering the crime rate. Via financial support from the government, residents can access opportunities for education, employment, medical care, and, thus, avoid doing wrong things because of poverty and desperation.

In conclusion, although police officers can be temporarily a workable precaution to diminish offensive behaviours, education and public welfare are the essential means to stop crime.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, furthermore, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46438746439 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86547375599 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612535612536 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3256115312 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.823529412 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6470588235 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259869597344 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766378345163 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440715913895 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147115862897 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046682180421 0.056905535591 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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