The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagre

Cooperation, the art of working as a group to achieve a collective goal, is undoubtedly an important value that the young people should learn to develop leadership in the society. The challenge we are facing right now are becoming so complicated that it can hardly be solved by an individual or rely on the expertise from a single discipline. For example, to build a robot, the people from mechanical engineering can solve the problems of assembly and power supply, while the people from software engineering are also required to program the control unit to coordinate different digital parts of the car. Another important lesson for young people is how to adapt to and survive in the competition. Both are necessary to become a well-rounded person, but cooperation is still considered more important, at least in most of the cases.

Firstly, although competition is always the source of motivation to perform better, sometimes it may blind an individual, making them not see the situations where group effort will be greatly more rewarded that the individual effort. Still take the instance of the car manufacturing, if the mechanical person only cares about being superior than other people, thus fail to coordinate with other members who are responsible with other parts of the project. The whole project will surely be jeopardized. One needs to look beyond the scope to see what is best on the individual level and capture the overview of what will most benefit the whole group. The defect of the competition can be perfectly compensated by the cooperation, which is where the instilling the sense of cooperation is vital for the young people.

This is the time that people admire brilliant ideas, in most cases, these ideas are proposed by one or two people, for example, Mark Zuckerberg's idea of building a social network to connect the world. It may be tempting to attribute all the credits to the individual who proposes the idea. However, we cannot ignore the process of the implementation of the idea, which is a process requiring collective effort of many people. Without the cooperation of others, most ideas will only remain as a picture on the whiteboard, and never happen eventually.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
... person only cares about being superior than other people, thus fail to coordinate w...
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Line 5, column 551, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hiteboard, and never happen eventually.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, so, still, thus, well, while, at least, for example, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 33.0505617978 36% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03005464481 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85007778044 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551912568306 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8785233864 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.5 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 5.21951772744 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150633379058 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510245641703 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616688693174 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935040815003 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316089919771 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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