Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position

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Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

According to the Scientist A nation should keep at least 25% of its wilderness for maintaining the ecological balance of that state. World that denied it has faced with natural calamities and consequence. The prompt says that a state should keep its remaining wilderness in natural state even if it could be developed for economic gain. I strongly agreed with the prompt for the following reason.

Firstly, We do not really understand what wilderness offer us. We think it is just wastage of land without being used. But it is also serving a purpose and it is doing many things for us which money can not do. For instance, trees give us oxygen. We take oxygen to breathe. If we destroy the forest we will not be able to get the required oxygen we need for the breathing. If we can not breathe we will die. Moreover, according to the researcher, the world has less amount of wilderness that it really need. The situation is already not very good. By destroying the rest of the wilderness we are going to make the situation worse.

Furthermore, we are dependent on the wilderness for many of our needs. Many people survive collecting the resource from it. For instance, Sundarban in Bangladesh is supposed to be a mangrove forest. It is situated in the division of Khulna and district of Sathkhira. Economy of the people on Sundarban largely dependent on the resource collected from the Sundarban. People of Sathkhira collect Honey , fish, wood, and sells them in market. Many also plant Lobster, prawn in the nearby area of Sundarban. If we are going to destroy the sundarban, it will have serious consequence on the life of the people. Many will be jobless. From the above example we can say that it will have serious consequence on the economy of country too.

Many of the people can argue that if we develop this areas into economic zone it will better serve us economically than it is doing now. Then, how will we manage the oxygen and the biodiversity it provide us. We should keep in mind that we can't even count money keeping our breathing stop. A wilderness can't be replaced by something else.

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...eeping our breathing stop. A wilderness cant be replaced by something else.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, then, at least, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 370.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72432432432 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61441075545 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2901782424 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.4285714286 118.986275619 52% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.2142857143 23.4991977007 56% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.35714285714 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.83258426966 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179251471729 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518135930792 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719499008822 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13231516807 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0962137586397 0.0667264976115 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 14.1392134831 52% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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