You have a problem with the computer at the office which has affected your work Write a letter to your manager and say What problem do you have What difficulties does this create for you What could be done about it

Dear Mr. Smith

I am working as a Quality Assurance office in Quality Department and this letter has been written to express my dissatisfaction regarding my personal computer at the office.

As I am looking after all the vendor-related documentation, hence my system contains the soft copies of all the formats and standard operating procedures. But from the past week, my computer is reflecting some memory full issues and needs to get updated by the additional drive of more memory. From this issue, I am unable to store my files and important drafts which is causing hindrance in my work. I consulted the information technology team and after inspection, they informed me that the additional hard drive needs to be purchased from the market and this needs the approval of the head of the department. They also warned that if memory is not updated soon there is a chance of loss of data which is temporary and is not saved.
So, I would like to request to kindly approve my application for the additional hard drive so that I can continue my work without any delay.
Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours Faithfully,
Jim hortins

Votes
Average: 9.2 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Jim hortins
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, regarding, so, after all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 954.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 196.0 206.0 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86734693878 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82131324265 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617346938776 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 297.9 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.6791893917 44.8134815571 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 76.5299724578 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 16.8248392259 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 4.34317383033 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101134861517 0.216113520407 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470286253599 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341615967085 0.0603063233224 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0689560321273 0.12726935374 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319065457819 0.0580467560999 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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