TPO 36 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better to finish a project completely and then begin another project than to work on two or more projects at the same time.Use specific reasons and examples to
The most influential factor for converting a country into a developted one is education. By knowledge, we can create different factories, infrastructures, and better food. Some people believe that the government should spend money on the education of very young people because they have more potential to be tought; others assume otherwise. Personally speaking, I support the latter group because of two reasons.
First, universities can use this money better. We can see that many extraordinary projects are developing in univsersities, where professors and students are walking on the edge of knowledge. So, universities can use this money for projects that are effective in development of a country. For example, a while ago I watched a documentry about a car factory in Iran called Irand Khodro. This factory was struggling about programming a robotic arm for wielding car framework. They could not rewrite program of the arm to use for manufacturing a new car. Finally, they allocate an adequate amount of money to a university in Iran for solving this problem. When university earned this new income, gave it to some students and professors as a fund for mentioned problem. After a while, the students solved problem and developed factory better. In some, universities can use money better.
Second, universities need money for their project. Students and professors have many creative projects in their mind, but they can put it into practice because of lack of money. These projects are very effective in the development of a country. For instance, when I was at university, I had a inovative idea about manufacturing a new system for collecting plastics from the environment. I proposed this notion to my professor, and he admitted that was a great idea, and we should persue it. Because the project involved many parts and components, It was a expensive one. As a result, when I refered to the university's principals for fund. they declared that they do not have enough budget for that. If the university had had eough money to suport me, I would have manufactured a new system could help my country where there are different environmental issues. So, universities need money for projects that are effective in a country's development.
In conclusion, I believe that a government should allocate money more on the education of universities because universities can take advantage of this money better, and they need money for many innovative projects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06332743924 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7637093504 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.56 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.096362995159 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397098091237 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386622518581 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0592566779523 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284939312818 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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