TPO 39 - Independent task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Jobs are the most important part of people's lives because those are the main source of life expenses, and individuals spend most of their time working. Some people believe that in the past finding a secure job was easier because there was less competition; others assume otherwise, believing that indentifying a successful career is easier in nowadays. Personally speaking, I support the later group opinion because of two reasons.
First, nowadays, the number of successful jobs are more, which make it easier for people to find one. In the past, people had limited choices of a secure job, and if they were locky enough, they could find one. Furthermore, if people became defeated in one job, they could not change their job, because jobs were very different from each other. While, todays, everyone's major can cover a vast number of different secure job. For example, two years ago, I started working for a company called Kavosh, which was manufacturer of sewer devices. After a while, I realised that I was doing a routine task for a year without gaining a good income or skill. Then, I resigned and searched for a more satisfying job. In this new career, I have better income, and I am struggling with new problems that can increase my knowledge. In sum, the range of secure jobs has increased in nowadays.
Second, todays, people have more better information sources to predict success of a job. Modern people can use the Internet, different books, and experties' opinion to gain data about a career. By refering to this information, people can find out about salary, environment, and the future of a work. Based of this comparison, they can judge that wheather a job is secure or not. While, in the past, the main source of people was their master, and by a small change in the market, they became unemployed.
In conclusion, I consider that identifying a career with a secure, successful job is easire todays because people have more choices and information than they had in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 341, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...entifying a successful career is easier in nowadays. Personally speaking, I support the lat...
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Line 2, column 866, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
... the range of secure jobs has increased in nowadays. Second, todays, people have more bett...
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Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... nowadays. Second, todays, people have more better information sources to predict success ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, second, so, then, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8504398827 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59566079414 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524926686217 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3596999132 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8888888889 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9444444444 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187295588658 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648630979475 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402724942364 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128651638564 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186187290398 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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