Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
I think being creative is very important. Because when you come across a problem, usaully you don't have necessary tools or education to solve that. So, you can use your creativity and solve problems by your own solutions. Unfortunatly, nowadays children are less creative because of two reasons.
First, most of activities that can thrive creativity are ablolished. nowadays, most of children are playing video games that can block their creativity or they are watching animations and other programs which are just for entertaining them. For example, when I was child, me and my friends wanted to play voleyball. We didn't have a court for playing. After a lot of search, we found a ground in neighborhood. After a while, we started preparing the court. Because we were child and didn't have neccessary equipement, every step of prepartion made us to invent a new solution. For example for creationg web of play, we bought some rope and kitten fasten together. So, activities like this can thrive children's creativity.
Second, educational systems and parents don't care about children creativity. Nowadays, most schools are just comparing students by exams. Every class is a oral and academic process and students don't care about what's going on in class. Parents, also look at children's grade. they usually send their children to kind of classes that can increase their grads. I remember, when I was chilld, parents sent their children to places like mechanical stores. And children were very happy and eager to go there. At first, They were very confused, but after a while they became expert and repaired some cars that their teacher couldn't do it and that caused a lot of surprising. So, parents don't care about children's creativity by enrolling them in pointless classes.
In sum, children are less creative because they do activity that is empty of activity, and schools and parents don't care about creativity. I think we can increas creativity of children by enrolling them in classes that can thrive and increase their activity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, look, second, so, while, for example, i think, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0625 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65604115826 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526785714286 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2855189971 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.875 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239434536104 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692384060942 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063026421057 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154112768025 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373413353691 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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