Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents can prepare their children for adult life by different ways. this prepartion can increase their happiness in adulthood. Some people think they can prepare their children by sending them to different classes. Others think the best way is a part-time job. I think one of the best ways to prepare children is encouraging them to take a part-time job because of two reasons.
First, participating in a part-time job can increase commucnication skills of children. In adult life having a good connection with other people is eesential, because humans are dependent to others for removing their needs. For example, when I was in highschool, I had a part-time job in my brother's grocery shop. I work there especially at noon or night, when my brother went to home for eating a meal. So, I was alone to handling shop at the moment. At first, I was so nervous for handling customers, because I did not have any experience, but, by passing time, I got better. Because of that, I developed some communication skills for meeting with strange people, which was so handy when I was at university, especially when I attend conferences for showing my projects. And I was not nervousness when I wanted to explain my projects to strangers in conferences. In sum, a part-time job can increase your communication skills.
Second, a part-time job can increase your chances for getting a job in adult life. By doing different part-time jobs, you have different experience in diverse works. So, when you go for an interview, you can rely on this experience. For example, when I was at university, I had a part-time job in a company for deigning robots, which was so beneficial. Because of this job, I had to increase my skills in different softwares, such as SolidWorks and Cateia, Which are basic woftwares for designing mechanical parts. When I graduated, I had an interview with a famous company for a job that had a great salary. Unfortunately, my mater's of science thesis project was not related to the position, but when I told interviewer about my experience in the part-time job, They were convinced to employ me. In sum, a part time job can increase your chances for a job in adulthood.
All and all, sending children to a part-time job can prepare them better for adult life because it can increase their communication skills and their chances for getting a job in adulthood.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, for example, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81862745098 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93905151996 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438725490196 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5660418216 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4782608696 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7391304348 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.47826086957 5.45110844103 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336535750715 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132656399876 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.098460108376 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268396316843 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0913752137455 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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