Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For students who are planning to work in business, learning about psychology is more important than learning about technology. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people in the world claims that students who are planning to work in business, need to learn about human behavior for well exchange of communication. However, I mostly disagree with those people, because I think learning about new technologies would help students more than psychology does. I will explore this idea in the subsequent paragraph.
First, I give more importance to technology because the demand for it is at a high peak in the world which already made it more important to us. For example, japan, a country that has been working closely with technology gave a message to the world that how to use technology for the economic growth of the country. Now, if you go to japan and suggest them use to psychology instead of technology in business would make consequences. The growth of japan’s gdp in the end of the 20th century was more than any other country at that time.
Second, learning technology is more important because it guarantees profit to us in business. The motive behind the invention of technology is more profit with the minimum hard work. For instance, if you compare the two countries, china and usa, you realize that china has more manpower than the usa, but still, usa leads the world, why this happens? The answer is the power of technology, yes, technology matters most. that’s why the usa has a gdp of 21 trillion dollars while chinas gdp is 14 trillion indicating the importance of modern technology and its more use in business than any other thing.
Last, learning technology is so important because it is asolutions vast field with unlimited knowledge that would be able to give solution about anything you want if you learn how to use it in daily life. For example, before the invention of social media we could not talk to our relatives in personally without a proper meeting but nowadays we can easily talk to them on just one tap. Video call technology made it so easy than we intended.
so to sum up, if business students start learning about psychology gonna benefit them in business then it would be great to learn that but giving it more importance than technology is no brainer. Thus, learning about technology is more important for students who desire to get in business.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80569948187 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61895572677 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2613989619 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.117647059 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7058823529 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.444442276135 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148365087955 0.076458572812 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990410089866 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270622333612 0.150856017488 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852100333494 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.