TPO 60: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Our surrounding has great influences on our characters. Residents, landscapes, and even job opportunities of a place can affect a person's attitude. Some people believe that living in one city is better because you do not have problems accompanied with a new places; others state otherwise. Personally speaking, I prefer to live in different places in my life span because of two reasons.
First, you do not get bored by moving to different places. Every new places can offer you new people to chat, new places to see, and new problems to solve. So, you always have a opportunity to be more excited. For example, When I was in school, I was so sad and tired because I was chatting with same people and visiting same places for a long time. These people and places did not have any new things to offer. While, after high school, I moved to a new city in Iran called Rasht to attend an university. In this place, I had many new classmates and roommates to know and talk. I went to many new places such as joungles, the sea, and villages for visiting them and chatting with their residents. As a result, I had everyday a new opportunity to cheer up myself. In sum, Moving from one place to a new one can increase your happiness.
Second, living in a new place can increase your money. When you live in a new place, you can increase your experience by dealing new problems, . New problems require learning new skills, and this can increase your chances to get a good job. For instance, when my sister was living in our city, she did not have a good job, and because there were not opportunities for other jobs, she could not get a new one. Ten years ago, she moved to a new city called Yazd. In this city, she had to pay much higher rent. To solve this problem, she began to search a new job. Finally, She found a new job with a good income. Since that time, she bought a new car, house, and many jewellary. So, living in a new city can make you rich.
In conclusion, I prefer to live in different cities because I will be happier, and I can be more wealthy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nfluences on our characters. Residents, landscapes, and even job opportunities o...
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...b opportunities of a place can affect a persons attitude. Some people believe that livi...
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...ot have problems accompanied with a new places; others state otherwise. Personally spe...
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... problems to solve. So, you always have a opportunity to be more excited. For exa...
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...not have any new things to offer. While, after high school, I moved to a new city...
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... new city in Iran called Rasht to attend an university. In this place, I had many...
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...ew city in Iran called Rasht to attend an university. In this place, I had many ...
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...an university. In this place, I had many new classmates and roommates to know and...
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...ith their residents. As a result, I had everyday a new opportunity to cheer up myself. I...
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...your experience by dealing new problems, . New problems require learning new skill...
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... be happier, and I can be more wealthy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.3681462141 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4708244954 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469973890339 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6177865589 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.92 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.32 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17281907133 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638320362584 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662388393824 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11687333857 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438503717916 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 11.7677419355 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.47 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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