The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales in various formats of the films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011

Essay topics:

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of the films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011

The Bar chart illustrates that the Annual number of rentals and sales of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

Overall, there are 4 kinds of sales which we need to discuss. They are Rentals, VHS sales, DVD sales and the Last one is Blu-ray sales. The Annual number of these Rentals and Sales are given between the years of 2002 to 2011.
In 2002, there are approximately 180, 000 Rentals which are leading then. In that same year, we can find some VHS sales which are about 80,000 which are huge then. We've seen some development of DVD sales then which are approximately 40, 000 in number.

Then after as increase in Technology, The rentals steadily went down. When it came to 2011, there are only 50, 000 Rentals, which makes Huge drop VHS Sales steadily dropped. By 2006, VHS Sales got expired in number. As of earlier DVD sales are very low in number, they are dramatically went up. By the year 2007, DVD sales crossed 200, 000 sales which are huge in number than ever before. In the year 2007, Blu-rays are introduced to the market and the sales got started. From 2008, there is steady rise in Blu-ray sales.

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Average: 6.7 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 165, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: We've
...h are about 80,000 which are huge then. Weve seen some development of DVD sales then...
^^^^
Line 6, column 250, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: low
...umber. As of earlier DVD sales are very low in number, they are dramatically went up. By the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 357, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: huge
... sales crossed 200, 000 sales which are huge in number than ever before. In the year 2007, Blu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 931.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 205.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54146341463 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17663762223 2.65546596893 82% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50243902439 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 266.4 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.7009809489 43.030603864 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.5 112.824112599 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.6428571429 22.9334400587 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 5.23603664747 11% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312375419141 0.215688989381 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134429750792 0.103423049105 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.172902975157 0.0843802449381 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290298049236 0.15604864568 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.227892215557 0.0819641961636 278% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 13.2329268293 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 61.2550243902 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.3012195122 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.46 11.4140731707 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 165, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: We've
...h are about 80,000 which are huge then. Weve seen some development of DVD sales then...
^^^^
Line 6, column 250, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: low
...umber. As of earlier DVD sales are very low in number, they are dramatically went up. By the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 357, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: huge
... sales crossed 200, 000 sales which are huge in number than ever before. In the year 2007, Blu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 931.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 205.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54146341463 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17663762223 2.65546596893 82% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50243902439 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 266.4 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.7009809489 43.030603864 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.5 112.824112599 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.6428571429 22.9334400587 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 5.23603664747 11% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312375419141 0.215688989381 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134429750792 0.103423049105 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.172902975157 0.0843802449381 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290298049236 0.15604864568 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.227892215557 0.0819641961636 278% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 13.2329268293 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 61.2550243902 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.3012195122 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.46 11.4140731707 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.