Claim It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero Reason The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree o

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Claim: It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.

Reason: The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

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Media scrutiny can affect one's reputation in many ways. The criteria that upholds someone as a hero is stark than ever since people from all around the world now has the power to criticize someone's actions. However, one thing people perceive very highly of has never changed and that is those who love and adore other people's lives. When we see the news or watch clips of videos that are phenomenal in the media, there are usually people who risk their own lives to save others who are on the verge of living or dying. So I would like to claim that media scrutiny can affect negatively in one's reputation, but because the requirements are full of stark and dull criticism, people who show affection towards others can easily diminish the media's cold mind and be perceived as a hero.
First of all, yes, in some aspects, scrutiny of the media can diminish one's reputation and is no longer viable to be regarded as a hero. For example, people who are publicly well-known should always be cautious of their actions. They have to be discreet in making jokes or when conversing because otherwise, they can be called a racist, sexist, or even a psychopath. People are imperfect but because people who consume the others' lives on media are imperfect, they want those who are shown on media to be perfect. If this goes on for those who are publicly known, they will eventually lose their reputation, their perspective, and even their own will to think or act because they can no longer act or think as they want which will to lead a diminish of one's reputation.
However, those who were not publicly known can rise up as a hero with one happening with the media's help, those who saved others' lives when no one else were too afraid to do so. Because saving someone's life is a very instinctive action but is also very rare to show such braveness to a stranger, media bolsters their action and make their reputation be higher than ever. Also, even when one's reputation has been diminished by the scrutiny of the media, once media sheds a light about their selfless actions, one's diminished reputation can rise up to the surface again.
To sum up, media's scrutiny is very harsh and people who make one flaw and does not meet the requirements may catapult to the low bottom and have their reputation diminished. However, that does not mean that they will stay at the bottom forever. Once those who show selfless actions and show people that they are trying hard to become a better person, the scrutiny would be long gone and the media would once again shed light upon them. Also, people who have never been on media can also benefit from the scrutiny, as mentioned above, those who shows love and affection towards others' lives when it can cause death to themselves.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, well, for example, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.3162921348 239% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 491.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63543788187 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31801958827 2.79657885939 83% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450101832994 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.0 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.0728715025 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.882352941 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8823529412 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209907139369 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838290433996 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505751235272 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145969586373 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420532915062 0.0667264976115 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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