Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is a more task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phones, online games, and social networking websites.
The educational system and educating children has been argued over centuries and its difficulties changed based on society conditions. These days, some scientists belive that educating students has become harder than the past due to social networks, internet enviroments and gaming which are unseperated parts of the children. This essay will discuss that why this opponion is completely true and provide a series of reasons.
First of all, the most of the student cannot manage their time and do not allocate sufficient time and energy on their assignments. Different social networks, games weblogs and websites have become very attractive over time. Students feel very excited when they use them, and work with them for a long time. This of course takes so much time and energy. because their time is limmited, they are not able to schedule properely and work on their education. For instance, a research is published in 2016 in Turkey, which indicated that about 65 percents of the stedents in that country spended more than 60 hours weekly playing games and less than 15 hours on their class assignments.
Second, the students who spend much of their time on these enviroments, often do not have a wealthy body, which leads to less strong mind than the past children. In the past, the children often read books in their spare time, and developed their mind. they also played sports and work on their organs by improving blood cycle in their body whcih cause to increasing in the number of nerves in the brain. the nerves are responsible for laerning new tasks and memorizing abilities. according to a paper published in the jurnal of Neuro-Research, the number of nerves in the students has become decrease to about a half in the last 25 years. this cause to decrease in learning ablities and in IQ tst value of the children.
the last but not the least reason, is that these activities kill the courisity of the children over times. spending too much time on the internet makes the mind lazy and distroys the ability of thinking. this phenomenon cause that the students become reluctant about their subjects in the schools, and therefor their education become face important problems. As an example, I can remember when I was student, most of the students in the class were exited by the new subjects. But two years ago when I started to teach in an elementary schools, the student prefered to spend their time on other thing rather than listening to the teacher.
This essay discussed that how spending time on the internet and gaming can affect the children education through disorgenizing their time for assignments, decrease the abilities of their brains and kill the students curisity. To conclude, in my view, educating the students is a much more difficult task than the past and face a wide range of problems because the students often prefer to spent a large amount of time using cell phones and in the internet visiting the websites, social networks or gaming.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for instance, of course, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2476.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9126984127 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55053484923 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490079365079 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.9 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2323985317 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.545454545 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9090909091 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77272727273 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264313587991 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795860242559 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579980129705 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160882042748 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587169645634 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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