The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of WWAC radio station.
“To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.”
In the memo, it is stated that the listener of current rock-music format is declining. The author has come to this conclusion on the basis of the growth of the retirement people.Although at first glance, the author's recommendation appears to be somewhat convincing, but we still need further evidence to make the conclusion.
To begin with, the author's claim relies on the evidence that the growth of the people which are mainly moving here after their retirement. It is possible that the old people do not like rock music.However, there is no evidence to prove the decline in listener numbers. A correlation between decline in listener numbers and growth of elder people dose not necessarily infer casual relation. It is entirely possible that there are some other important factors contributing to decline in listener numbers ,such us young people move to the urban city.
Furthermore,The author underline they must make a switch to the new residents’ taste.However, we need more evidence of the new residents’ taste.A survey must be conducted throughout the new residents asking them the change of WWAC radio station.It is possible that people do not listen to radio nowadays.Instead of listening to radio, people prefer to use Youtube or Spotify.For example, few people in Taiwan listen to radio, most of the elder people prefer to watch talk show on TV.The radio is never in their choice.
Additionally, the author was so confident of a news and talk format.The argument assumes that people who love this kind of radio will also love to listen at WWAC radio station.
Even thought a form of radio that is increasingly popular in the area. However, it is still a question that the new format can reverse a decline in listener numbers.For example, people who enjoy news and talk format radio in Taiwan are usually listen to one host, and they are not interested in other one ,which means they are loyal to a specific host.It may be difficult for new talk radio to emerge.
In conclusion, the author's recommendation as it stands now is full of flaws due to lack of the evidence. If the author is able to provide more reliable data for the above argument and offer more evidence, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to reverse a decline in listener numbers.
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e-rater score report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 1875 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.653 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.522 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.633 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.578 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...listener numbers.For example, people who enjoy news and talk format radio in Taiw...
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... radio to emerge. In conclusion, the authors recommendation as it stands now is full...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 391.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95652173913 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88137809534 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485933503836 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 122.251107698 57.8364921388 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 161.5 119.503703932 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5833333333 23.324526521 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.70786347227 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229824442412 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898904286172 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550410243233 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117128194317 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305532577108 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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