Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
education system in some parts of the world has became an business rather than educating the people.The modern education is more tends towards the job oriented approach rather than on how they experience and gain the knowledge.Children are restricted to the syllabus and spending most of their time in preparing for their exams.
For example,If a 12th grade student who is preparing hard for his/her entrance exams to get good school for the further eduction mostly spends his/her entire time on the problem solving and the different approches of the problem.But , they don't focus much on the subject and the sole concept behind it.This restricts their knowledge and puts up pressure on their brains regrading the admissions.
A person with knowledge on subject feels much confident rather than the one who brushes up on the problems solving from the subject. In order to take any challenges in life one should have knowledge on the subject on which they want to rise.Students who learns concepts, automatically tries to explore the topics and indulge themselves into the joy of educating themselves.
In the recent times, Due to over population and the competive spirit across the globe makes people to focus more on the competitions and setting boundaries around themselves with limited knowledge which is needed to clear those are much far behind the one's who always thrives to learn something new and surrounds them with knowledge will keep on suceeding in their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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education system in some parts of the world has b...
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...world has became an business rather than educating the people.The modern educatio...
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...iness rather than educating the people.The modern education is more tends towards ...
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Suggestion: Children
... they experience and gain the knowledge.Children are restricted to the syllabus and spen...
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...paring for their exams. For example,If a 12th grade student who is preparing h...
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Suggestion: But
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... subject and the sole concept behind it.This restricts their knowledge and puts up p...
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... the subject on which they want to rise.Students who learns concepts, automatically trie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1246.0 2235.4752809 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 241.0 442.535393258 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17012448133 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.55969084622 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73986574219 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 215.323595506 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597510373444 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 369.9 704.065955056 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 23.0359550562 208% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.2899787101 60.3974514979 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 249.2 118.986275619 209% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.2 23.4991977007 205% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131150497695 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717825736001 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557488262475 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0816222206646 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588081084996 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.0 14.1392134831 191% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.22 48.8420337079 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 12.1743820225 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.38706741573 118% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 11.8971910112 231% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.2 11.2143820225 189% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.7820224719 178% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.