Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
One’s education is a very broad process which takes time and involves school, family and society. In fact, someone said that in order to educate a child, three generations around that child needed to be educated. The prompt states that some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit and some believe the opposite. In my opinion, I partially agree with the argument and argue that education is sacred because it helps students learn a plethora of things, concepts or skills that may be used in life.
Firstly the best place where students get the most beside family is school and teachers. Thus, everyone’s dreams are on teachers hands. For example, my first teacher seemed she was the first person that had the highest expectations on me. She freed my mind from any fear by always making it clear and appealing for me. She was passionate. Actually all my teachers were great and inspired me to be a teacher that loves her students. Perhaps, years ago the education was not perfect, but now things have changed. Technology, science and research have gone far regarding teaching and learning.
Secondly, education is the main concern of many nations. The methods, psychology and every decision is based on research. It takes a big number of people to work and make teachers’ job clear and easy. For example, in every school there are extra people that help teachers and students with their great mission of teaching and learning. Research has shown that progressive countries have a well developed education. Consequently, progressive nations keep investing in education and find the latest and the best technologies to teach. They make sure that student’s wellbeing is always the main concern.
In conclusion, even if we assume that education restrains our mind and spirit, we have many reasons to believe the opposite. This would not happen, if nations would invest on educaton and teachers invest on us. Teachers are putting together, passion, love and experience to succeed I their big mission. Now students are free to choose what they think they are best of and follow their dreams because they are supported.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 361.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01939058172 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56374446075 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554016620499 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6512189506 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.7826086957 118.986275619 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6956521739 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 5.21951772744 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187777063149 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049365680164 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0979885094214 0.0758088955206 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122041651462 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0958632214664 0.0667264976115 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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