Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

It is true that there is a significant increase in using advertising by all commercial companies. It is argued that the consumers are highly purchasing more products than they used to due to successful advertisement, while some people believe that society no longer concern about it because of their popularity. I strongly agree that nowadays people are paying at least attention to these companies' activities.
On the one hand, there are two primary reasons why people are affected by advertising and decide to own products appearing at supermarket. Firstly, the images of items are pop up into customers' mind. Increasing smart phone, modern gadgets where people are exposed a thousand and thousand information everyday, includes advertisement with high proportion. For example, being following by GPS, a lot of products are introduced are sold around our locations, which prompt people making decision to buy it immediately. Secondly, Young people following famous persons who are ambassador of some famous brands. As a result, they are willing to buy any thing which was sold by their idols.
On the other hand, it seems to me that communities are feeling bored with the prominence of commodities advertised by the frequency and untruth information. On the first glance, Both viewer and customer feel these advertisement kind of a pain owing to the fact that their appearance are constant. if we have to eat the same dish every single day, we will be tired with that, like advertisement. Moreover, it is also argued that people are also informed wrong about the product, such as their function or color, for example.
In conclusion, I reckon that advertising are too familiar with every body to make them feel interest in content. However, there are still a number of people thinking that human continues go with products thanks to advertisements.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, at least, for example, i reckon, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15946843854 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90728237596 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624584717608 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7385155452 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.533333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6 7.06120827912 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275002883767 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805797271016 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452862607037 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154272173214 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476172656869 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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