55、In order for any work of art—for example, a film, a novel, a poem, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
If a art work wants to be valuable, some assume that it must be accessible to most people. It seems to hold water, especially for certain specific purposeful works, but in more scenarios, I am skeptical on that point. Because what makes art works being great and memorable is not its easy-attainable essence, on the contrary, is its considerable furtive metaphor underlying its apparent complexity. Indeed, if works with ostensible simplicity elicit profound contemplation of people, they will be serving as the best, merit-wealthy arts.
While arts accessible to people are not always arts possessing merit, the existence of such arts could not be repudiated, and sometimes those works' simplicity is the selling point. Just as a film describing how a man living around poverty and negativity works to break out limits of classes, which is named The Pursuit of Happiness. It has simple storylines but powerful and contagious influence to people straggling in life, merit and worldview it expresses has been regarded as a paragon of diligence. Or like a novel wrote by Peterson, Doctor Zay, using simple and nimble style to depict a woman doctor but evoked a critical discussion regarding female doctors in late years in 19C. As mentioned, a plethora of works bringing people power or thinking are based on an assumption that they are fully understandable of those works. Its terse words or meanings proliferate its influence scope.
However, what mention precedent is just a feature of those renowned works, and the logic is that those works' simplicity is one of factors affecting their success, not a direct reason leading to it. Hence, there must be any alternative factors acting a more important role. One is that its essence. The essence is that latent meanings underlying those apparent words, figures or lyrics. Peterson, a writer widely regarded as a pure pious icon of American convention, was been alternative ascribed as a so-called contradictory writer since the emergence of feminist literary scholarship in 60s. Because she delineate things in her works in a pessimistic tone but, on the contrary, she also performed as a sheer and sardonic commenter of social critique. Some scholars conclude that, her works are in fact using apparent pessimistic tone to evoke readers' emotion to make them embrace social change, in other words, the assumed pious conventionality was exploited by her as a disguise for her subjective ideology. Thus, critiquing a work's quality is not a simply check of its understandableness towards most people. But a scrutinization of its context and subtext, in that most of revolutionary works of novels and poems were written by authors living in a turbulence era, that forced they to create surreptitiously.
In sum, despite simplicity may be a feature favored by people, it determines no credentials for success. Simply listing a work's simplicity and accessibility to people as a touchstone is improper due to the heterogeneity of contexts and subjects of art works.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: delineates
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Message: You used an adverb ('simply') instead an adjective, or a noun ('check') instead of another adjective.
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'works'' or 'work's'?
Suggestion: works'; work's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, thus, while, in fact, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2530.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19507186858 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07454533149 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552361396304 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 809.1 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1050943976 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.476190476 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1904761905 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267346856245 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716310485198 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584629841308 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162841279222 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262742911215 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 100.480337079 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.