TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

“A wise man should consider that the health is the greatest of human blessing, and learn how by his own thought to derive benefits from his illness" once said Hippocrates, it reflects to me that health is wealth all we have. Universities and colleges should keep spending money and give more funds the sports and social activities and spend less money in libraries and class. While it is true that the libraries have contributed to the communities as social institutions where the community members help each other and serving its people who enjoy reading, One can not deny it is obviously valuable for Universities to spend money on sport and activities when it comes to helping the students to remain healthy, and relaxable, and learning valuable things.

Sports help the student to keep healthy, encourage them to try to exercise. Nowadays students make lots of excuses for not doing exercise. Some have time problems, Some have Physical problems, and some have space problems. However, no matter what the circumstance the students have, they should healthy life by taking a few mints to exercise. The universities should encourage the sports by providing the students a good place to practice exercises, and make a competition with other universities, and reward If they win, a good strategy to foster them to share, and help them to remain healthy. By doing exercise, they can avoid many diseases such as high blood pressure, heart attack, and diabetes. According to the most recent data released by State Health Department, above 80 percent of American people completely cured of many diseases such as the diseases that I mention before due to change their lifestyle by doing exercises every day. For example, my husband suffered from hypertension two years ago, His doctor’s advised him to change his lifestyle by losing weight by doing exercise every day, as the result, he completely cured of this disease, and he is still doing exercises to remain healthy.

In addition, to keep healthy, sports and social activities help the students to learn valuable things. Social activities help the students to become sociable, and talk with many friends who speak a different language, having different interest, and having a different culture, a good way to help them to learn from other culture and bring the world together. It is helping the students to have new friends. The sports also help the student to learn valuable experiences such as how to be co-operative since as many tasks should be divided among different individual. No one can win the game, No matter how strong he is or how fast he is, so they should co-operate with each other to win the game. A valuable experience; which benefit them in the future. O top of that both can help them to relax and release their stress that they are experienced at schools, help them to focus more on their studies, and get a better grade for their future.

As all things considered, even if the libraries provide many benefits to the students, the value of sports and social activities definitely superior to that of investing in the libraries. The students can live without libraries, they try to find an alternative to the libraries, such as e-books but the sports are very important to keep them healthy, sociable, and learn valuable experience can not be learned from books.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'for example', 'in addition', 'such as', 'it is true']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229793977813 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.167987321712 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.095087163233 0.0866891130778 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0301109350238 0.046263068375 65% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0586370839937 0.0685040099705 86% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0887480190174 0.118717715034 75% => OK
Participles: 0.0364500792393 0.0351676179071 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6816249044 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.053882725832 0.0309702414327 174% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0887480190174 0.0887237588012 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0190174326466 0.0209618222197 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0174326465927 0.0139019557991 125% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3370.0 2387.08602151 141% => OK
No of words: 561.0 408.028673835 137% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00713012478 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.352941176471 0.338922669872 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.26559714795 0.251872472559 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.213903743316 0.174417080927 123% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128342245989 0.112833075102 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6816249044 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.524397521467 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 56.2587039995 59.2087087015 95% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 28.05 20.5533526081 136% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.1150245365 48.84282405 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.5 120.699889404 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.05 20.5533526081 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.55 0.644075263715 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 54.609714795 45.7405998639 119% => OK
Elegance: 1.38271604938 1.45489161554 95% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26354827761 0.300154397459 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.135590971515 0.103427244359 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0854139821411 0.0752933317313 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.522508392904 0.497263757937 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.175691203178 0.151897553556 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114112657906 0.114077575197 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933008608372 0.0781384742642 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.463916474111 0.336927656856 138% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.029365342824 0.067059652881 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217032390639 0.210909579961 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550087961918 0.0618886996521 89% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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due to change their lifestyle
due to the change in their lifestyle
due to changing their lifestyle

the value of sports and social activities definitely superior to
the value of sports and social activities is definitely superior to

Sentence: While it is true that the libraries have contributed to the communities as social institutions where the community members help each other and serving its people who enjoy reading, One can not deny it is obviously valuable for Universities to spend money on sport and activities when it comes to helping the students to remain healthy, and relaxable, and learning valuable things.
Error: relaxable Suggestion: No alternate word

flaws:
No. of Words: 561 350

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 561 350
No. of Characters: 2707 1500
No. of Different Words: 259 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.867 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.825 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.536 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.407 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.181 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5