Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people think that it is easy now for young people to organize their life. Some people say that because the advancement in technology today it becomes faster for young people to organize their life. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that with the advancement of modern life young adult should carefully organize for their life. The basis of my opinion is social and financial.
Form the social perspective, young adult need to be more organized in their life, to have an easier life. today life become so busy. People do not have time to do all their work. For example, if people are able to organize their daily schedule, that will help them to have abetter life. For instance, I am a working mom. I have three boys. Working and being a mom is not an easy task. I need to mange my time. So I try to work during the morning while my kids are in school. I pick up my on my way back from work. When I arrive home I prepare food for the whole family. We eat together. I then help my children with their home work. I think for people to have a successful social life, they need to have a good plan.
Financially, today people are attracted to the fancy life style of the world. All the people around the world want to buy a big house, a fancy car, and put their children in a better education system. If people incorporated in this life, with out planing for the future, they will be in a disaster. For example, personally I aim to buy a big house. I want to enjoy the time with my children. I need also a big car, my family are getting bigger now. If I buy all this stuff without planning about my financial situation in the future. I put my self in a disaster. I will lose every thing. The hose the car and every thing. I need to plan for my self that I will be able to pay the mordge of the home and the car. And that I can save some money for my children education.
In conclusion for the reasons I mentioned above I believe that organization and planning is the best way for having a better life, specially with todays modern life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Today
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... car, my family are getting bigger now. If I buy all this stuff without planning a...
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Suggestion:
...I believe that organization and planning is the best way for having a better life...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1699.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.26884422111 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34370399377 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439698492462 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5729334431 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 53.09375 100.406767564 53% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.4375 20.6045352989 60% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.375 5.45110844103 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223034642962 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627404673881 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671688892033 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173459782775 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518634836951 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 4.9 11.7677419355 42% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 58.1214874552 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.6 10.9000537634 61% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.22 8.01818996416 78% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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