The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Most people benefit a lot from the flourish of modern society, although there’re some defects affecting the lives of some ordinary people. The continuous development of our earth is unstoppable, therefore what we can do is to take the full advantages of such development instead of thwarting this trend.
One of the adverse effects modern life has on us is that we become lazier than we were several decades ago. The convenience of fast food chains leads to the unhealthy eating habits of the public, which may cause the obesity problem among those who frequent fast food restaurants regularly. Also, it is well known that obesity has link to many potential diseases. What’s more, even if people eat home cooking cuisine, they may also ingest too much nutritions due to the luxurious life style. This trend should be paid more attention to deal with, in case many people will suffer when they grow older, thereby putting extra burden on the health care system of our society.
However, it is equally important that we shall not forget the merits of convenient modern life. Luxurious lifestyle gives people the chance to live a happier life. For example, after the 'opening and revolutionary policy’ has been laying down for more than 30 years, the living standards of ordinary Chinese people have increased dramatically. People with higher incomes are able to give their family a better life and their children a better educational opportunity, which contributes a lot to the prosperity of China in the long run.
In addition, people are more likely to know better about the outside world with the use of technology which is an appealing feature of contemporary life. The technological industry has experienced a soaring development in the past decades, which enables the public to acquire more information and learn more disciplines only using the computer and internet. Also, It is not imaginable that we can get to know strangers without seeing them in person. Such an opportunity to know the outside world remotely makes people who don’t receive good education in their young ages have the chance to craft their life skills such as programming, management and etc.
In sum, despite of the flaws modern life brings to our society, such as obesity and other related health problems, the overall benefits it draws on people should not be overlooked. Our society should dig more merits of contemporary life and overcome the shortcomings of it to make our world a better place to live.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'linked'.
Suggestion: linked
...Also, it is well known that obesity has link to many potential diseases. What's...
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Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...oking cuisine, they may also ingest too much nutritions due to the luxurious life st...
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Line 7, column 652, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... skills such as programming, management and etc. In sum, despite of the flaws modern ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'in addition', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238197424893 0.240241500013 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.143776824034 0.157235817809 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.1330472103 0.0880659088768 151% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0450643776824 0.0497285424764 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.049356223176 0.0444667217837 111% => OK
Prepositions: 0.100858369099 0.12292977631 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0300429184549 0.0406280797675 74% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.71087014712 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0343347639485 0.030933414821 111% => OK
Particles: 0.00214592274678 0.0016655270985 129% => OK
Determiners: 0.0922746781116 0.0997080785238 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.019313304721 0.0249443105267 77% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.019313304721 0.0148568991511 130% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2511.0 2732.02544248 92% => OK
No of words: 415.0 452.878318584 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.05060240964 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.371084337349 0.366273622748 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.253012048193 0.280924506359 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.171084337349 0.200843997647 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127710843373 0.132149295362 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71087014712 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 219.290929204 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575903614458 0.48968727796 118% => OK
Word variations: 68.8258101511 55.4138127331 124% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6194690265 82% => OK
Sentence length: 24.4117647059 23.380412469 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5189590654 59.4972553346 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.705882353 141.124799967 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4117647059 23.380412469 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.674092028746 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 49.7129695252 51.4728631049 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.54954954955 1.64882698954 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373642985851 0.391690518653 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0954583719505 0.123202303941 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0719590881249 0.077325440228 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.559630715835 0.547984918172 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.143397058567 0.149214159877 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154787290981 0.161403998019 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075589685318 0.0892212321368 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.393367629288 0.385218514788 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0488130072634 0.0692045440612 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258412022918 0.275328986314 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553262342401 0.0653680567796 85% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.4325221239 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.