The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette."On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involv

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.

"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The author points out a solution, which is to restrict the number of mopeds the rental companies can rent from 50 per day to 25 per day, to reduce the accidents rate involving mopeds and pedestrians. Such a method seems to be plausible at first glance, but on a closer scrutiny, it relies on several unproved assumptions.

To begin with, the author correlates the increasing population in summer season with the high accident rate. However, the letter only mentions the population increase, but fails to articulate whether such a trend is an aberration or it has already existed for years. Without such information, it is entirely possible that such an increase is due to big social event only held in last summer, which brings a lot of tourists to Balmer Island. Unless the author presents detailed statistical data about the demographic situation, I will not be convinced about the relationship between the population increase and the high number of accidents with mopeds and pedestrians.

Moreover, the author also states that the target of imposing the rental limit is to decrease the number of accidents involving both mopeds and pedestrians. Detailed information regarding the accurate number of mopeds accidents and pedestrians accidents is not presented. It is entirely possible that the number of mopeds accidents is quite low, while the proportion of pedestrian accidents, which may not be caused by mopeds, makes up most of the total accidents happened. If this is the case, the regulation to limit the number of rentals will not achieve the goal, which is to reduce the accidents rate, as expected. Therefore, concrete evidence should be presented to verify that the moped is the main cause of accidents happened in summer season.

Finally, even if the moped is the major cause of so many accidents, imposing such an restriction may not have the desired result. In order to bolster the restriction, the author quotes the achievement made by the neighbouring island of Seaville, where the accident rate has successfully been reduced by 50 percent by introducing a similar restriction. However, the author presents no information about the topography and population about the neighbouring island, which is crucial to make a comparison between these two island. Without such information, it is imprudent to draw the conclusion that by introducing the limitation regulation, the number of accidents will be reduced considerably.

In sum, to support the recommendation, the author need to collect more information about the population data, the causes of accidents in Balmer Island and the comparison between the two islands. In this way, the credibility of the conclusion will be boosted significantly.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...use of so many accidents, imposing such an restriction may not have the desired re...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'to begin with']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260869565217 0.25644967241 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.151138716356 0.15541462614 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0703933747412 0.0836205057962 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0434782608696 0.0520304965353 84% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0124223602484 0.0272364105082 46% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12215320911 0.125424944231 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0455486542443 0.0416121511921 109% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.99541196594 2.79052419416 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0351966873706 0.026700313972 132% => OK
Particles: 0.00414078674948 0.001811407834 229% => OK
Determiners: 0.136645962733 0.113004496875 121% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0165631469979 0.0255425247493 65% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0124223602484 0.0127820249294 97% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2718.0 2731.13054187 100% => OK
No of words: 436.0 446.07635468 98% => OK
Chars per words: 6.23394495413 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.410550458716 0.378187486979 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.302752293578 0.287650121315 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.23623853211 0.208842608468 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.174311926606 0.135150697306 129% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99541196594 2.79052419416 107% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 207.018472906 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479357798165 0.469332199767 102% => OK
Word variations: 53.2153626225 52.1807786196 102% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 25.6470588235 23.2022227129 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6296463939 57.7814097925 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.882352941 141.986410481 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6470588235 23.2022227129 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.764705882353 0.724660767414 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 55.9222881813 51.9672348444 108% => OK
Elegance: 2.07 1.8405768891 112% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.635151007456 0.441005458295 144% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.171324325041 0.135418324435 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0923206052923 0.0829849096947 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.671414476504 0.58762219726 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.120272356203 0.147661913831 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.328356864708 0.193483328276 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116496405108 0.0970749176394 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.544604169778 0.42659136922 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0991363908135 0.0774707102158 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.488855715534 0.312017818177 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638775555971 0.0698173142475 91% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.33743842365 36% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.87684729064 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 12.0 5.36822660099 224% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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