The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
The author of the letter to the Balmer Island Gazette argues for the reduction in the number of mopeds rented during the summer time to reduce the number of accidents involving the mopeds and pedestrians. The author provides with the example of nearby of island of Seaville for the argued policy. Though the island of Seaville was successfully able to reduce the number of accidents by 50 percent, the author doesn’t provide enough evidence for this argument. Further questioning is required for further investigation into this matter.
The author argues for the reduction in the number of rentals at summer time would lead to the decline of annual accident rate. But does not provide any evidence for the same. The number of accidents in the winter time could be far more than in summer..
Further, there is no evidence provided behind the cause of accidents, are they occurring due to mopeds or due the increase in the number of pedestrians. It could be the case that as the number of pedestrians increase, the sidewalk becomes crowded and people are forced to walk on the motor roads which lead to the increase in accidents between the mopeds and pedestrians. The city council should investigate for the causes of these accidents and then decide whether they should take actions on the mopeds or on any other pedestrian related issue.
The city council should also take care that the tourism of the city should not be affected by their policy. Decreasing the number of moped rental, could not only hamper the businesses of the rental companies. But will also hamper the businesses of places which are located away from the city centre. Also, limiting the number of rentals per rental company could also result in the increase in the number of companies and the situation might become the same leading to no improvement.
The city council should analyse the timing of the accidents, the causes and also should think about the tourism of the city to get a wholesome view of the situation and then decide on the policy .
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. need to argue:
By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 347 350
No. of Characters: 1646 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.316 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.744 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.384 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.12 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.389 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[2]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
... the number of mopeds rented during the summer time to reduce the number of accidents invol...
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Line 1, column 466, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...vide enough evidence for this argument. Further questioning is required for further inv...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 65, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[2]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...e reduction in the number of rentals at summer time would lead to the decline of annual acc...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 251, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...er time could be far more than in summer.. Further, there is no evidence provided...
^^
Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... situation and then decide on the policy .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 346.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86994219653 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49357986024 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450867052023 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4381540484 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.333333333 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0666666667 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.26666666667 5.70786347227 22% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176273847129 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657362700553 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806257094576 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0929739991402 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739823078692 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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