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Company has advertised a vacancy job at major sport event and this job is unpaid job. And the job will start next month. Why would like to work in this job? Ask the the company something that you need to clear up.

Essay topics: Company has advertised a vacancy job at major sport event and this job is unpaid job. And the job will start next month.

Why would like to work in this job?

Ask the the company something that you need to clear up.

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Dear Sir/Madam,

Hope this letter finds you well.

I am writing this letter with regards to the vacancy which you have advertised. As I am really interested to work on this field and this job is my passion. I believe that this job is unpaid and that's fine for me, because I need to develop my skills in your respective company. Although my experience is not that much, but I can manage depending on my experience. I noticed that this job is going next month in my city.

But I am going to ask you some questions which I need to clear it up.

1- do you have a meal including during the day?

2- how many hours do I need to work per day.

Thanks in advance for answering the questions.

Waiting for your reply.

Yours faithfully,

Jack

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
.... I believe that this job is unpaid and thats fine for me, because I need to develop...
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Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is unpaid and thats fine for me, because I need to develop my skills in your resp...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, really, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 26.3917525773 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 622.0 937.175257732 66% => OK
No of words: 139.0 206.0 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47482014388 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43363162301 3.78020617076 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44290954587 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 127.690721649 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625899280576 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 178.2 290.88556701 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 16.3608247423 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.3533679062 44.8134815571 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 51.8333333333 76.5299724578 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.5833333333 16.8248392259 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.75 4.34317383033 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286635424263 0.216113520407 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0948118636331 0.0766984524023 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102396787033 0.0603063233224 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0857583948235 0.12726935374 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0971474994353 0.0580467560999 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.4 8.37731958763 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 85.69 70.7449484536 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.0 7.45979381443 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.46 8.71597938144 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 41.2886597938 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.4 8.54432989691 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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