18/10/2017 These days more emphasis is being placed on university education. Vocational training is not encouraged, and thus there are few qualified trades people. To which extent do you agree or disagree?
Many aver tertiary education is being promoted while no attention is paid to motivating people to take vocational training. Consequently, there is an insufficient number of well-prepared craftsmen. I disagree with this prospect and below the reasons on which my stance is based will be discussed in details.
Primarily, the popularity of having a college or university degree keeps steadily growing while the interest toward vocational programs has consistently been diminishing in recent years. This stance is supported by statistics that demonstrates almost ninety percent of yesterday pupils dream of getting a tertiary education while only seven percent see non-college education desirable. In addition, a recent research conducted in such countries as Germany, France, Canada, the USA and China showcases that parents often perceive pursuing a higher education as a necessity for being successful; so, they openly encourage progeny to ignore vocational education and strive to university one. The similar situation may be observed in many developed and developing countries alike. In other words, the trend exists in the world.
However, the decrease in qualified tradespeople is hardly caused by the trend. Firstly, the technological advancement has made the toil of many craftsmen easier and less demanding to having a specific set of skills. To illustrate, in the 1950s and 1960s a truck driver must have had vocational training about repairing and maintaining mechanical parts of his lorry because the vehicles were not reliable and a driver was expected to take care of many problems on his own. By contrast, today’s freight automobiles are extremely reliable and the user of a modern lorry will unlikely face a necessity to repair it. Secondly, the volume of knowledge in many fields keeps growing and complexity of machines used goes up as well. Thus, working on such highly elaborated equipment and their maintenance requires from employees to have a degree. In other words, there are few positions that can be occupied by those who get vocational training.
To sum up, although vocational training indeed is not being encouraged and higher education is being promoted. It appears the trend does not lead to the decrease in the number of qualified tradespeople. we rather have a deal with a cause-effect mistake, when the fall in demand for qualified craftsmen results in the rise of importance of getting a tertiary education and to the sunset of vocational training programs.
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although vocational training indeed is not being encouraged and higher education is being promoted. It appears the trend does not lead to the decrease in the number of qualified tradespeople.
although vocational training indeed is not being encouraged and higher education is being promoted, it appears the trend does not lead to the decrease in the number of qualified tradespeople.
flaws:
No. of Words: 393 350 //less content wanted from the conclusion
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 393 350
No. of Characters: 2059 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.452 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.239 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.915 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.118 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.385 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.471 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.051 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, in addition, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2114.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37913486005 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98794267184 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58524173028 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9783213555 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.444444444 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05555555556 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131717837857 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0392868059973 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364452658181 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085085322529 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253172972779 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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